Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people say workplace and home should be clean. Everything arranged in correct place. I think this is good habit people and children should be follow them. Tidy environment is good for all societies.

Firstly, individuals should clean to their house because it is important for their health.when people clean their sorrounding environment their physical health is very good. Clean their house parts, like kitchen, washroom, bedroom, outside garden. When their apartment is neat then they feel relax and fresh. While you look their house neat and clean then you feel happy. It is crucial for everyone.

Secondly, They should also keep clean your workplace. Some people throw rubbish on workplace. It is not good for their health. But everyone should be follow the rules. When workplace clean then they complete their work, projects and another task easily. When other interviewer go there for interviews then they have a good impression. Everything arranged in the office, like tables, chairs, computers. Tidy is more good impact on their health. For instance, when students clean their classroom they easily focus on their study. I think it is good habit to clear their community and society.

Finally, From my perspective, people should clean their sorrounding area. They should tidy their hometown streets. It has good impact to their fitness. They feel comfortable and fresh in clean places. Government should also make a rules to keep clean different areas. They should provide the bins when people throw rubbish in the bin then environment should be tidy everytime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you support keeping homes and workplaces tidy, and you also extend this view to public areas. Relevant reasons include health, comfort, concentration and making a good impression on interviewers; the classroom example helps illustrate the workplace point. However, several ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, you say a clean home improves physical health and that tidy surroundings benefit fitness, but you do not explain how or give a specific example. The discussion also shifts from the question’s focus on organisation and putting things in the correct place to cleanliness and rubbish. Develop the central idea of organisation more directly and support each main reason with a clearer explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, paragraphs beginning “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally,” and a consistent overall position. These features help the reader follow the broad sequence from home to workplace and then the community. However, progression within paragraphs is often repetitive: several sentences begin with “When,” and ideas such as health, feeling fresh and being comfortable recur without adding much development. Some links are unclear, as in “While you look their house neat and clean then you feel happy,” and the final paragraph moves from personal surroundings to government rules without a smooth connection. Group related points, use clearer references, and make each paragraph develop one main reason rather than listing similar claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the main topic, including “neat,” “rubbish,” “impression,” “focus” and “environment.” There are also attempts to express a range of effects, such as feeling “relax and fresh” and completing tasks “easily.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the response awkward: “Tidy is more good impact,” “clear their community,” and “sorrounding environment.” Spelling errors such as “sorrounding” are noticeable, and “clean” is used repeatedly where more precise terms could distinguish cleanliness from organisation. Build a wider set of accurate collocations for order, hygiene and productivity, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple patterns, and you attempt some longer clauses with “when,” “because” and “while.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction, verb forms, agreement and punctuation. Examples include “children should be follow them,” “They should also keep clean your workplace,” and “Government should also make a rules.” The opening fragment, “Everything arranged in correct place,” also needs a complete verb and appropriate articles. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “health.when” and “Secondly, They.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then combine them with subordinate clauses; check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries during revision.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.