Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

It is often argued that some people believe it is essential to keep the home and workplace clean, with things organized in the correct place. I strongly agree with this view because it helps people work more efficiently and productively. However, it needs extra time and effort to keep the place organized.

The main reason for my view is that in a workplace there are so many things and tools, etc that every employee needs to use in their work daily; if the equipment is properly organized and placed in the right spot, only then can everybody use it. For example, in an auto repair center, there are several tools, and there are different jobs for each mechanic. If everything is properly organized, only then will the mechanic be able to find the tool and finish the repair on time. On the other hand, if the workplace is not organized, then he needs extra time to find the right tool, resulting in a delay and the customer has to wait longer. Moreover, it will leave a bad impression and result in a bad review from the customer.

Another reason is why it is necessary to keep the home tidy and organized. Firstly, to prevent some skin diseases, flu and fever, etc. (diseases because of dirt), one must keep their surroundings clean to prevent unwanted illness and save money and time from being ill. Furthermore, keeping things organized at home saves a lot of time. For instance, most people have to go to their workplaces or for college, if they lose things such as clothes and keys, etc. (things that have everyday use). Therefore, it will waste a lot of time and cause stress in the early morning if one has to reach their workplace.

In conclusion, I firmly agree that keeping things organized and tidy at home and the workplace saves a lot of time and money, and prevents unwanted troubles in daily life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you strongly support keeping both homes and workplaces tidy. You address both settings and give relevant reasons, including easier access to tools at an auto repair centre, better customer service, cleanliness at home, and avoiding the stress of misplaced keys or clothes. The examples help extend your main points, particularly the mechanic scenario. This fits a response that addresses the task and supports its ideas. Some claims, however, are broad or not fully explained: the link between tidiness and preventing “skin diseases, flu and fever” would benefit from a more precise explanation, and the cost-saving point is asserted rather than illustrated. Develop these points with clearer reasoning to make the support more consistently convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs discuss the workplace and home, and a conclusion restates your position. The progression within the workplace paragraph is especially easy to follow, moving from organised tools to faster repairs and better customer impressions. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion.” At times, however, connections feel mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated “if… then” pattern and “only then.” The home paragraph’s opening, “Another reason is why it is necessary,” is awkward and does not smoothly signal the point. Use more varied transitions and clearer topic sentences, and make references such as “it” unambiguous, to strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the topic and distinguish between the two settings, with relevant terms such as “equipment,” “mechanic,” “surroundings,” and “customer.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words and phrases, including “organized,” “things,” “time,” and “bad.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural: “skin diseases, flu and fever” is an unclear grouping, while “unwanted illness” and “bad review” could be expressed more precisely in context. The parenthetical explanations, such as “(things that have everyday use),” also interrupt the writing rather than adding natural detail. Aim for more precise collocations and avoid repeating broad terms; this will make your meaning more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional sentences (“if everything is properly organized…”) and a concluding clause beginning “if one has to reach their workplace.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, and the paragraphing helps the reader follow the argument. Some grammatical and punctuation issues remain. The opening, “It is often argued that some people believe,” combines two reporting structures unnecessarily. “Another reason is why it is necessary” is also an awkward sentence construction, and the long sentence beginning “Firstly, to prevent…” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. In addition, the semicolon in “daily; if the equipment…” joins clauses in a way that makes the sentence cumbersome. Practise complete sentence structures and review punctuation in longer sentences.

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