Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modern era its very inportant make you house or workplace neat and clean becuase if you keep you place look clean its look nice and beautifull

for explame pepeol who work as mechcine they have to take care of there tools and make it in place. or in line because if they did not place there tool carefull its very hard to find so in that pepeol should keep tools in place so they can find them easly when they need for keep tools in place they can some cup bord where they can orgnized there tools and its looks nice and beautifull.

On the other hand some people did not like to keep their place neat and clean there is a couple of reason most coman one is that they dont have space where they can place the tools because they have small shop and sometime have lots of work they are busy in their work i that case they dont have enough time for make there tools in place. They are doing this for long time they let use it and they like to work like that .

In conclusion, I strongly believe that keeping our house or workshop tidy is not just about appearance it also improves our productivity , save time and creates a healthy lifstyle and its look bealtifull and nice

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall opinion in the conclusion: keeping a home or workplace tidy improves productivity, saves time and supports a healthy lifestyle. The examples about a mechanic needing to find tools and a busy shop with limited space are relevant to the question. However, the position is not stated clearly at the beginning, and the discussion of why some people do not stay tidy is not fully connected to your own view. The ideas are also brief: for example, you mention that tools are easier to find but do not explain further how organisation affects work. The response is 23 words below the required minimum, so there is less space to develop and support your reasons. State your opinion directly in the introduction and extend each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening paragraph supporting tidiness, a contrasting paragraph about people who do not organise their spaces, and a concluding opinion. The use of “On the other hand” signals a change in direction, while “In conclusion” makes the ending easy to identify. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together without clear sentence boundaries. For instance, the discussion of mechanics moves from finding tools to cupboards and appearance in one long sequence. Some links are also mechanical, and the contrast paragraph does not clearly explain how it relates to your own position. Use shorter, clearly punctuated sentences and make the relationship between each example and your argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “neat and clean,” “tools,” “organised,” “productivity,” and “healthy lifestyle.” These words help communicate the main ideas about workplace order and its benefits. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “nice and beautiful,” “tools,” and “place.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “inportant,” “becuase,” “easly,” and “lifstyle,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “make it in place” and “cup bord.” Build a wider set of topic-specific phrases and check spelling carefully; more precise choices will help you explain the benefits and practical difficulties of staying organised.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express reasons and contrast, including a conditional idea about tools being difficult to find and a longer explanation of why busy workers may not organise their space. This shows an effort to connect clauses rather than relying only on isolated statements. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts at longer sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. For example, “if you keep you place look clean its look nice” has problems with clause structure and verb forms, while “they dont have enough time for make there tools in place” has an incorrect infinitive pattern. Articles, pronouns, agreement and punctuation also need attention. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with “because,” “although” and “if,” checking each clause for a clear subject and verb.

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