Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is undeniably true as some people say keeping home and workpalace neat and tidy is very important. I strongly agree with them because keeping things organised will not only keep us refreshed but also bring an orderliness to our lifestyle. This essay will discuss more details on how keeping things in order helps us to live good life.

Keeping things organised will bring positivity to the lives of people. It will help an individual to maintain a structure in their routines and thus become more disciplined. So it is important to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that keeping the home and workplace tidy is important, and you introduce two possible benefits—feeling refreshed and having more structure. However, the response addresses the task only minimally because these points are not explained or supported with relevant examples. The second paragraph begins to develop the idea that organisation encourages discipline, but it ends mid-sentence (“So it is important to”), leaving the reasoning incomplete. The response also contains 92 words, below the required 250, so it cannot provide the developed reasons and examples the task asks for. To improve, explain each benefit, connect it to everyday life, and include a specific example before concluding your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall direction: the opening states your opinion, and the next paragraph starts to explain a benefit. Linking expressions such as “because,” “not only…but also,” and “thus” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is very limited, and the second paragraph stops abruptly, so the reader does not see a complete explanation or conclusion. The phrase “This essay will discuss more details” announces a plan, but the promised discussion does not follow. Develop a clear sequence of paragraphs—for example, one reason per body paragraph—and use linking words to show how each example supports your view. Complete each paragraph with a full idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “organised,” “structure,” “disciplined,” and “orderliness,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. There is also an attempt to use a more formal phrase in “maintain a structure in their routines.” However, the range is narrow because the response is short, and some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural. “Workpalace” is a spelling error, while “live good life” is not a natural phrase in this context. “Bring an orderliness to our lifestyle” is also awkwardly formed. Aim for precise collocations such as “keep the workplace organised,” “create a sense of order,” and “lead a more productive life,” and vary vocabulary when explaining your examples.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including the complex opening with “because” and the paired construction “not only…but also.” Most of the short sentences communicate a recognisable meaning. However, grammatical control is uneven: “It is undeniably true as some people say…” has an awkward clause structure, and “helps us to live good life” is missing an article. The final sentence, “So it is important to,” is incomplete, which prevents the idea from being understood fully. The response also offers too little evidence of a sustained range of accurate structures. Practise completing sentences, checking articles, and building clear complex sentences, such as a reason followed by an explanation and example.

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