Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is necessary to keep your house and workplace tidy and organized some people says while others argue. In my opinion, it is important to keep home and workplace tidy and well organized as gives peace of mind.

To begin with, If the place where we work is well organized and clean it will give the positive vibes and peace of mind that helps to work properly. Moreover, one will not feel annoyed instead he will be relaxed and calm while doing his work making the work much easier. Further with positivity around the ideas will flow naturally and the work will be done on time.

Furthermore, if the place where we live is neat and clean and well organized it will give positive vibes and more visitors come to visit such people. Moreover, negativity will be vanished making the environment of the house peaceful stress-free and calm. it will give the inner satisfaction and enough confidence to the person which helps him to work effectively and efficiently resulting in creating wealth. on other hand if everything is not organized properly it's hard to find the things that makes a person annoyed and he will not be able to work properly.

To conclude we can say that it is very important to keep your surroundings neat and clean and well organized as it helps to maintain peace of mind due to which one can easily focus on one's work and a person remains calm and stress free and attracts positivity and good vibes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that tidiness is important for both home and work environments. The ideas are relevant, focusing on mental clarity, productivity, and social benefits. However, the development is somewhat repetitive; the arguments for the workplace and the home overlap significantly in their focus on 'positive vibes' and 'peace of mind.' To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more distinct, nuanced reasons for each setting—for example, discussing professional efficiency versus personal relaxation—rather than using similar vocabulary and concepts for both. The position is consistent throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the flow between sentences can feel repetitive. For instance, the transition between the home and workplace arguments could be smoother. Additionally, there are minor issues with punctuation and sentence structure that occasionally affect the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, body, and conclusion, which helps the reader follow your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on repetitive phrases like 'positive vibes,' 'peace of mind,' and 'neat and clean.' While these terms communicate your meaning clearly, they do not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'negativity will be vanished' (should be 'negativity will vanish' or 'be eliminated'). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations related to organisation, productivity, and psychological well-being.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('some people says'), missing articles, and run-on sentences. For example, 'It is necessary to keep your house and workplace tidy and organized some people says while others argue' is syntactically confusing. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing commas and incorrect capitalisation (e.g., 'on other hand'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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