Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Few individuals say it is essential to keep your residence and your office clean with everything arranged neatly and in the right location. This essay will discuss about why I think it is a positive habit.

it is important to keep the workplace and home tidy because it increases productivity. For example, on Saturday I was tired and did not sweep the floor at home and everywhere was messy, I could not enjoy a meal there. However when I cleaned the environment, I could eat, read and perform some activities like exercise there. Also, there is a popular saying "Cleanliness is next to Godliness".

It is believed that it improves health because being in an untidy place promotes bacteria, fungi and viruses to the homes and workplace. For instance, dirty workplace brings rats which is the main host of Ebola virus. In addition algae breed from constant wet molds. Furthermore, it also reduces stress from outsourcing staffs to help tidy the disorganised offices which will tarnish the company image. Also it creates a pleasant working environment for the workers. To illustrate, I'm an optometrist and on arrival at my office, I noticed my janitor was sick, i sent her home and performed the cleaning myself, my patient commend my effort and gave me some tips.

In conclusion, I believe keep the home and workplace tidy and organised is a positive habit. Overall, it improves health, creates pleasant working environments, reduces stress, and increase productivity. I would love for it to be emulated by everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that keeping homes and workplaces tidy is a positive habit. The ideas are relevant, covering productivity, health, and stress reduction. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat uneven. The example regarding the optometrist is personal and relevant, but the claim about rats and Ebola is scientifically inaccurate and hyperbolic, which weakens the argument's credibility. While the position is clear throughout, the supporting arguments could be more logically extended and grounded in more realistic scenarios to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs with a clear introduction and conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'For example', 'However', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the personal anecdote and the general argument is slightly disjointed. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to ensure a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their opinion clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'emulated' and 'tarnish', which are used correctly. However, there are also instances of awkward word choices or collocations, such as 'outsourcing staffs' and 'dirty workplace brings rats'. The range is sufficient to convey meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Spelling is generally accurate, though the range of vocabulary remains somewhat limited to everyday topics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'This essay will discuss about' (unnecessary preposition), 'dirty workplace brings rats' (missing article), and 'my patient commend my effort' (incorrect verb tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices in the second paragraph. While the errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from reaching a higher band. A greater focus on subject-verb agreement and article usage is needed.

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