Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Respecting the workplace and home is an essential aspect of our day-to-day lives. Excellent thoughts come from the positive minds, an organized mindset. There are number of negative impacts of not organizing your surroundings which we are going to talk about in this essay along with the set of examples.

One clear fact is, It makes you less focused and under-confident as a person. You keep on juggling between various things as your surroundings will keep bothering you to focus on one thing.

In addition, It is very easy to make judgment about someone by looking at how tidy they keep their house or workplace. Your house and workplace tells more about your personality rather than your outlook. An untidy place creates doubts and lack of confidence in you from other person's perspective. If your are an organized person, it not only simplifies your living standard but also makes you a solution-oriented personality. People tend to inclined more towards such personalities who looks for solutions rather than searching problems.

Key aspects which proves how organizing things help are: Primarily, if everything is organized in proper order it makes you less panicky, at times of hurry, you have to spend less time in completing your work whether it's domestic or some task at your workplace. Taking for instance, your manager asked you for an important online document which you have saved a month ago. To illustrate this further, one approach could be checking each and every document in your documents and the better approach is to make an organized folder of important documents to avoid such panic in future. Secondly, cleanliness not only creates an organized environment for you but also cleanses your overall aura and thought process whereas mess makes your mind chaotic and distracted.

In conclusion, although cleanliness doesn't sit in many of our priority list as we don't consider it to be a hurdle in our daily work, but I oppose this fact. Being organized is like a cherry on the top because it does add value in our personality, It makes us more simplified, focused and respectful as a person.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion in favor of maintaining a tidy environment. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact on focus, professional perception, and efficiency. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While the example of the manager and the document is helpful, other points, such as the 'aura' of cleanliness, are less clearly explained. The position is consistent throughout, but the essay would benefit from more depth in the supporting arguments to reach a higher band. Overall, it covers all parts of the task adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices are present, such as 'In addition', 'Primarily', and 'To illustrate this further', although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is generally clear, though the link between 'aura' and 'thought process' in the second body paragraph is a bit abrupt. Overall, the flow is sufficient to guide the reader through the argument without significant confusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task. You use some good collocations like 'solution-oriented personality' and 'day-to-day lives'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as 'Excellent thoughts come from the positive minds' (which is slightly unnatural) and 'People tend to inclined more towards' (grammatical error). The range is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but there is a lack of more sophisticated or precise vocabulary that would elevate the response to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent minor errors in grammar and punctuation. Examples include 'There are number of negative impacts' (missing article), 'If your are an organized person' (typo), and 'Your house and workplace tells' (subject-verb agreement). Additionally, some sentences are slightly fragmented or awkward in their construction. Despite these errors, they do not impede communication, and you show a reasonable attempt at using varied sentence forms.

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