Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The essence of this given statement about clean environment is highly debated, disputable and a controversial topic in today’s contemporary world. Here I will try to discuss both the opinions and justify my stance.

To start with, there are number of peoples who are much more found of maintaining a neat and clean environment, they are of the opinion That, it is a basic principle of health life, secondly, a clean home keeps your mind fresh and your are tend to spent a happy hour with you family.

To continue, a tidy area or a desk at workplace keep you focused and helps you maintain a positive energy hence excellent performance, maintaining a proper hygiene around us keeps healthy and bacteria free, for instance during the time of covid each and every household and the workplace were conducting hygiene protocols such as using sanitizers, wearing masks, using gloves, and maintaining a proper distance which helps in avoiding the spread of bacteria. During The pandemic we not only learn the importance of a tidy surrounding but also the importance of self hygiene.

On the other hande we have a group of some lazy people who are inclined towards this statements, firstly there is a theory that says you are only damaging you skin by bathing daily which some people take as a excuse. Secondly they say that maintaining a proper hygiene around you slowly turns you into a OCD patient, moreover, they just try to find any reason to skip the cleanliness around them.

To conclude with my opinion, I’m very much inclined to maintaining proper tidiness and cleanliness around yourself irrefutable of your surroundings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. You mention that you will discuss 'both opinions,' but the prompt asks for your opinion, not a balanced discussion. The section on 'lazy people' is somewhat irrelevant to the core question of whether tidiness is important, and the argument about OCD is not well-supported. While you state your position in the conclusion, the body paragraphs lack a clear, sustained argument. To improve, ensure every paragraph directly supports your stance and provides logical, relevant examples rather than digressing into unrelated theories about hygiene or skin damage.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward transitions and run-on sentences. For example, the second paragraph contains several distinct ideas joined by commas rather than full stops, which makes the progression of thought difficult to follow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To start with' and 'On the other hand,' they are sometimes used mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall structure would benefit from more precise signposting to guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'peoples' instead of 'people,' 'found of' instead of 'fond of,' and 'irrefutable of' instead of 'regardless of.' You rely on basic descriptors and some phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'happy hour with you family.' To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring that your word choices are contextually accurate and grammatically correct.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('a tidy area... keep you'), incorrect verb forms ('are tend to spent'), and punctuation errors, particularly the overuse of commas to join independent clauses. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using full stops to separate distinct ideas rather than relying on comma splices.

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