Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Maintaining hygiene and cleanliness is significant for our health whether it is home or work place. It is vital to keep things accurately and well organized. I believe it is crucial to keep it neat and tidy. It has many advantages and demerits.

First and foremost, hygiene plays a pivotal role in our life as it helps to enhance our healthy lifestyle. For instance, keeping desk clean gives sense of content and satisfaction. Working and staying in dirty area leads many disease condition like, food poisoning, malaria and so on. In addition, it has detrimental effects on mental health, as person can not focus on work due to peculiar smells around there. Moreover, it also disturb the harmony of work. In recent survey, it stated that many people suffer from mental disturbance due to ambience which is not clean. Other than that, it has some hazardous effects on person who keep things clean on daily life. For instance skin irritation, allergy, sneezing, even some get mental disorder like obsessive compulsive disorder.

On the other hand, keeping clean our selves and place we stay make us more happy and it keeps us healthy. Prevent from illness. it help us to alleviate stress. It confine the entry of rats, mice, insects and harmful pests. It enhance the social life, smelling good looking clean make person more confident and attract other people. For example, wearing immaculate outfit make it more eye catching and approachable.

To recapitulate, keeping things organized it very vital to keep ourselves healthy physically and mentally. Eventhough, it is from house chores or office work. It should be everyone's responsibility to maintaining place neat and tidy. On contrast, person should not take task vigorously and harm themselves and get injured.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of tidiness at home and work. You present a clear position, though the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. For instance, you mention both advantages and 'demerits' (disadvantages) of cleaning, but the section on the negative effects of cleaning (e.g., 'skin irritation') is slightly tangential to the core prompt about the importance of organization. While you provide relevant examples like 'food poisoning' and 'immaculate outfit', some points are under-developed. To reach a higher band, ensure that all supporting arguments directly reinforce your main thesis rather than introducing conflicting or less relevant points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'First and foremost', 'In addition', and 'To recapitulate', which help guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'On contrast' instead of 'In contrast'. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the flow feel a bit disjointed at times. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used with greater precision would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'pivotal', 'detrimental', 'alleviate', and 'immaculate'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'keep things accurately' (instead of 'keep things organized') and 'leads many disease condition' (instead of 'leads to many diseases'). There are also minor spelling or grammatical slips, such as 'our selves' (ourselves) and 'Eventhough' (Even though). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision and sophistication of your lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('it stated that', 'it help us'), missing articles ('keeping desk clean'), and awkward phrasing ('person can not focus'). While you attempt complex sentences, they often contain errors that slightly distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of articles, prepositions, and verb forms. Increasing the frequency of error-free sentences will be key to moving into the higher band range.

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