Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Maintaining hygiene and keep the surroundings neat and tidy are depend on individual's raising and personal preference. It is stipulated that keeping your surroundings well organised and clean in your office and home is significant. There are various reasons behind it, like, clean and well oraganised environment have great impact in work performance and focused mind.

To start with, people who work in such environment have high performence rate, they do well in their day to day tasks. It helps them generating ideas in well structured way. For example, some international companies like the Apple Mobiles always encourage their employees to keep their offices clean and well maintained, as they researched about the impact of cleanness and work productivity, they found out that clean environement helps employees to perform task better which increase revenue of the company. Also, clean and tidy environment increase their capabilities of focusing on one particular task without unnecessary distractions.

Although it is depend on person about how they want to keep their places. Some famous scientists like Albert Einstein loved their laboratoray in a way they left yesterday, he was claiming that it aid him to caught up his left over work task more quickly. Clean surroundings has power to keep one indiviual more discipline and follow everyday routine with significant level of strictness.

I personally like my home and my office very neat and well structured, I keep everything their fixed positions. It helps me to alleviate everyday stress. I have observed that untidy and littered place make me axious and I feel more distractions than usual amount.

In conclusion, indeed it is important to have well organised and clean surroundings, especially individual's work or home spaces but it is also depend on one indiviual that how they want to keep their space. Although we cannot neglect the importance of having a clean place of working and living.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of a tidy environment and providing a clear personal opinion. You have included relevant examples, such as the reference to Apple and Albert Einstein, which helps to support your arguments. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the link between tidiness and revenue could be explained with more depth. The position is consistent throughout, and you acknowledge the counter-argument regarding personal preference. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-elaborated point to avoid minor generalizations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use cohesive devices such as 'To start with', 'Although', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the discussion of Apple and the focus on productivity could be more fluid. Referencing is generally clear, but ensure that pronouns and cohesive markers are used with greater precision to improve the overall flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'alleviate', 'stipulated', and 'distractions'. However, there are several spelling errors ('oraganised', 'performence', 'environement', 'laboratoray', 'axious') and some awkward collocations, such as 'individual's raising' (should be 'upbringing') and 'caught up his left over work'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider grasp of natural word combinations to reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('are depend on', 'environment have', 'it is depend on') and article usage. Additionally, some phrasing is non-standard, such as 'it aid him to caught up'. While the meaning remains clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and verb forms prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent verb tense and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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