Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of cleanlyness is ubiquitous across the globe, due to its paramount importance. One school of thought opine that few masses tell that it is necessary to keep your house and workplace neat and clean with proper organised and also correct place. If asked about my perception, I storgly accord with the aforementioned statement, and the reasons for my inclination are articulated in the trail paragraphs.
Commencing with the best reason about neat and clean home and workplace their health will better. To explain it, If they do mess in the house and workplace they will be get infected by sevarl health issues but if they organised everything and do cleaning their house and work place they do not have any health issues. To cite an example, In USA majority people hire cleaning staff for their house and work place just because they do not want their life risk like in USA if they do not clean their house small bugs and insects will be there and they not only damage their health but also house. That stands as a paragon. Therefore people prefer their house and work place neat and clean.
Another reason is that if they will do cleaning and organised everything it is good for them just because they will like to come at home or go to workplace. This is because nowadays people first prefer to clean their house and also work place just to they like to come back their house like if they do not clean and organised they will come back but not as a good mood. For example, In Canada most people prefer to spend their time in home or like to go to their jobs first reason that it is very clean and well organised. That stands as an epitome. Thus people do more importance to tidy their house and work place.
On the close scrutiny, I conclude that, people prefer to do more important to clean their house and workplace just because of health and they will like to come back their home if it is clean.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion in favor of keeping homes and workplaces tidy. The ideas are relevant, focusing on health benefits and psychological well-being. However, the development is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the argument regarding health is supported by a generalized example about bugs and insects in the USA, which is not particularly convincing or well-integrated. The essay follows a standard structure, but the ideas could be extended further with more sophisticated reasoning to reach a higher band. The position is consistent throughout, but the overall development remains at a basic level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'On the close scrutiny' or 'That stands as a paragon.' These phrases are used in a way that does not naturally connect the sentences. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences feels disjointed due to the repetitive nature of the phrasing. While there is an overall attempt at a logical structure, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the awkward transitions limit the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cleanlyness,' 'storgly,' and 'sevarl.' The student attempts to use more formal vocabulary, such as 'ubiquitous,' 'paramount,' and 'epitome,' but these are often used incorrectly or in contexts where they do not fit naturally. The word choice is frequently imprecise, such as 'few masses tell' or 'do mess.' To improve, the student should focus on using common vocabulary accurately before attempting more complex, academic-sounding words that may lead to collocation errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('their health will better'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures ('If they do mess in the house... they will be get infected'). The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with some attempts at complex ones that are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly impede the fluency of the writing.
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