Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A clean environment is more essential to live a healthy life . I agree with this statement that it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. In this essay I will provide appropriate reasons for agreeing this statement before drawing any particular conclusion.
A dirty place leads to unhealthy life of the people. A dirty place give birth to new diseases. Moreover if a person lives in a dirty place or works in a dirty workplace is considered as poor people. First reason to keep these places tidy is that people start living a healthy life. People get rid from the harmful diseases. For example, a dirty place gives birth to malaria, dengue mosquitoes, but if a person lives in a clean place will not be infected by these mosquitoes.
There are some other reasons for agreeing this statement, one of them is that living in a clean place working in a clean place also represents the standard of living of the people, which help them to earn their living well. Another reason for living in a tidy place and working in well cleaned place is that it develops a positive attitude in the person and helps to develops its communications skills among the employees, which will help him to develop his organizational skills.
In conclusion, although a dirty place leads to a unhealthy living of the people yet in my opinion keeping a workplace and home clean is more important to live a healthy lifestyle.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion in favor of maintaining a tidy environment. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention health and professional benefits, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the link between cleanliness and 'communication skills' is asserted but not logically explained or supported with a concrete example. To improve, focus on expanding your main points with specific, illustrative examples rather than listing general statements. The conclusion is a bit redundant, merely restating the introduction rather than summarizing the main arguments effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive. Phrases like 'Another reason for' and 'First reason to' are used to signal points, but the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the third paragraph where the connection between 'standard of living' and 'earning their living well' is vague. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'dirty place' and 'clean place' repeatedly. There are also some minor collocation issues, such as 'get rid from' (should be 'get rid of') and 'well cleaned place' (should be 'well-cleaned' or 'tidy'). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'hygienic,' 'cluttered,' 'productivity,' or 'mental well-being,' and ensure you use them in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'A dirty place give birth' (subject-verb agreement error), 'is considered as poor people' (incorrect structure), and 'helps to develops its communications skills' (incorrect verb form and pronoun usage). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and consistent verb forms will significantly improve your accuracy.
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