Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy,with everything organised and in the correct place. Indeed to my mind ,the principle benefits of keep your home and workplace is well oraganised are hygiene and time consuming .every aspect of the prompt will be addressed with strong justification and relevant exemplification subsequently.
Predominantly ,The significant advantage of home and workplace are must be clean is that hygiene. This is undoubtedly due to the fact that hygiene means dust free and clean area of the house and workplace so that no chance of contamination of any dieses who spread easily in dirty place and some person shows sensitivity in dust area and easily infected.
Moreover time consuming is another fundamental merit of this notion because if we organised all things in home and workplace so we can easily found every things whatever things are small and big and we can easily identify every things in less time because each things are placed in according to their manner and safe our extra time when we have a sort period of projects and project is completed in given time when workplace things are placed in series manner without any disturbances .
In home ,everything organised is also important because some problem are not give hint ,they appear suddenly like first aid ,machinery tools ,cutlets and utensils .
As such ,it can be conclusively reiterated that although hygiene and time consuming are indispensable important of keep you home and workplace in the correct manner.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing an opinion on the importance of tidiness. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention hygiene and time management, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the explanation of 'time consuming' (which should be 'time-saving') is circular, and the examples provided in the final paragraph are brief and lack sufficient elaboration. To reach a higher band, you need to extend your ideas with more specific examples or logical consequences. The position is clear, but the overall development is somewhat basic and lacks the necessary depth for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'As such', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that does not naturally connect the ideas. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'some problem are not give hint', which disrupts the logical progression of the argument. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as using 'time consuming' when you mean 'time-saving' or 'efficiency', and 'dieses' (diseases) and 'cutlets' (likely meaning cutlery). These errors sometimes impede the reader's understanding. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common lexical items accurately. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for common topics and ensure that the words you choose accurately reflect the meaning you intend to convey.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('some person shows', 'each things are'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or contain awkward phrasing that makes them difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of plural forms, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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