Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed by few individuals that houses and offices should be cleaned essentially, such as by arranging household things and official equipment on a place, where they belong to. I disagree with this notion to some extent, this essay will discuss reason behind my this viewpoint in the forthcoming paragraphs.

There are many reason why people should take responsibility to make their office sites and household tidy. The first and the foremost reason, by keeping neat and clean surrounding areas, parents can help to keep their family members safe and healthy. To explain this, when people do not care about the garbage that is sitting in their homes for more than weeks, its would bring fruit flies and insects in the house, due to the fact that family members could easily get sick and unhealthy. Moreover, disarrangement of the files and paper work in the office do not only stressed out employees, but also could delay to meet deadline to submit assignment of work on proper time.

In addition to this, if home is nice and clean, family members and guests would really like to visit these kind of place to relieve their stress of office because they could feel that place more comfortable instead of more overwhelming than school or the office. On the other side, it has become hard for people to keep their homes neat in this fast- pacing world as they are quite busy in doing their daily chores such as dropping or picking up kids from school and doing household chores and office duties. As a result, they do not have extra time to take care or look after their houses, since they think that there are more crucial things to complete than just focusing on their homes.

To conclude, although it is not easy for people to look after their homes because of busy schedule, being healthy and less stressed out is more prominent for individuals to live their life in a good manner.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of tidiness in homes and workplaces. You present a clear position, although your introduction states you disagree 'to some extent,' yet the body paragraphs largely support the benefits of tidiness, creating a slight contradiction in your stance. The ideas are relevant, such as health benefits and workplace efficiency, but the development is somewhat superficial. For instance, the point about the 'fast-pacing world' is a good observation but could be more directly linked to your overall argument to ensure a more cohesive position. To reach a higher band, ensure your thesis statement accurately reflects the nuance of your entire argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use some cohesive devices such as 'The first and the foremost reason,' 'Moreover,' and 'In addition to this' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'On the other side,' which is not the most natural way to introduce a counter-argument. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'these kind of place,' where the plural/singular agreement is inconsistent. Improving the variety and natural flow of your linking words will help the progression of your ideas feel more seamless.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'disarrangement,' 'crucial,' and 'prominent.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'cleaned essentially' instead of 'kept clean,' and 'submit assignment of work on proper time' instead of 'meet work deadlines.' Some phrasing is also slightly unnatural, such as 'fast-pacing world' (should be 'fast-paced world'). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, you need to focus on more accurate collocations and idiomatic expressions to move into the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('disarrangement... do not only stressed out'), article usage ('on a place'), and awkward phrasing ('its would bring fruit flies'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization, and try to incorporate more complex structures with greater precision.

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