Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A group of people argue that it is very crucial to keep your surrounding tidy weather it is your home or workplace, all things should be organized properly and place it in a correct place. In my opinion it is important to keep things clean and organized, as you will feel energetic and motivated at your work and home. There are many others reasons for this belief. It will be explained further in the following paragraph.

Analyzing the statement and explaining further, the first and foremost reason to keep home and workplace tidy and organized is, obviously person will feel energetic at their workplace, as they will work more effeciently without any distraction. For example, a recent study in korea regarding the workplace tidiness it shows employees who make their shelves and desk organized work more smoothly than the ones who are messy and the study shows 85% of the employees who keep all things organized.

Moreover, cleanliness directly related to health, if people are keeping everything clean organized the life expectancy will be increased it by two times, there are the less chances to get sick. As the cleanliness brings healthy and positive environment. Example, person who are cleaning their surrounding their health is very good compared it to the ones who are does not make their surrounding tidy.

In conclusion, person being tidy at work and at home work effectively and their health will be good as compared with the others. In my opinion, being tidy and organized is very important at home and at their work, as person and work effectively and energetically as all this together brings prosperity and healthy environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion on the importance of tidiness. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons such as productivity and health, the supporting examples are underdeveloped and lack logical depth. For instance, the claim that life expectancy increases 'by two times' due to cleanliness is factually unsupported and hyperbolic, which weakens the persuasiveness of your argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting points are realistic and logically sound, and expand on your reasoning with more nuanced explanations rather than relying on unsupported statistics.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'In conclusion' to link your thoughts. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'There are many others reasons for this belief. It will be explained further in the following paragraph.' Improving the variety and naturalness of your transition words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the ones who') is more precise would enhance the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific words like 'productivity', 'motivated', and 'life expectancy'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'weather' instead of 'whether' and 'place it in a correct place' (redundant). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and you rely on basic descriptors. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing to demonstrate a wider and more flexible range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'person who are cleaning their surrounding their health is very good' and 'the ones who are does not make their surrounding tidy.' These errors, along with issues in subject-verb agreement and article usage, occur frequently. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are noticeable and prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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