Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few indviduals beleve that clean and tidy environment is important at workplace as well as organising things to perfect place. I am totally agree with this statement and will discuss this in upcoming paragraphs.
Due to modern era, people are spending lot of their time in offices to fulfill the needs of themself and their families which results in stress and can lead to many health concerns but if the office space will be organised and clean it will reduce their stress as some time work gets stopped due to little things like missing a file which can trigger people stress. For example, I was a person who don't clean their workplace which was effecting my work performance and I was not aware of it but one of my friend tell me about it and said " try to maintaine your workplace neet and clean" which improves my speed and performance.
Furthermore, keeping house organised is very good as a good environment matter a lot for a healthy life style. It also gives a very good impression to guests whenever they visit the house that gives inner piece to people.
In my opinion, keeping work and home place organised is very important thing to live a healthy and happy life style.
Overall, maintaining cleanness is crucial and have lot of advantages like, less stress, smooth work and inner piece and I am agree with the statement
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion on the importance of tidiness at home and work. However, the essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 236 words. This under-length significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the main points are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. The argument regarding the workplace is supported by a personal example, but the section on the home environment is quite brief and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples to ensure the response is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. There is a clear progression of ideas, moving from the workplace to the home environment. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Overall'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved to make the writing feel more natural. While the structure is coherent, the limited length prevents a more sophisticated use of linking words and cohesive structures that would be expected at higher levels.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. There are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'indviduals', 'beleve', 'maintaine', and 'neet'. The phrase 'inner piece' is a misspelling of 'inner peace'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To improve, focus on expanding your vocabulary related to productivity and lifestyle, and pay closer attention to spelling and accurate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'I am totally agree' (should be 'I totally agree'), 'people are spending lot of their time' (missing article), and 'one of my friend tell me' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. You should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence construction to improve your accuracy.
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