Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this new era majority of individuals say that it is integral to keep house and workplace hygiene and organized. According to me it is crucial because it gives you positivity.
Firstly, according to my perspective hygiene is one of the important parts of the life and people want to keep their workplace clean because it gives them positivity and it also improves their lifestyle. Moreover, it also improves the environment, specially it also controls pest as well its good for
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 81 words long. Consequently, the ideas are severely underdeveloped and the task is only partially addressed. While you state your opinion that keeping spaces tidy is crucial for positivity, you do not provide sufficient examples or a well-developed argument to support this position. The response ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the argument incomplete. To improve, you must expand on your main points with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at organization using transition words like 'Firstly' and 'Moreover'. However, because the text is so short and ends abruptly, there is no clear overall progression or logical development of ideas. Paragraphing is not effectively utilized, and the lack of a conclusion or a fully developed body paragraph makes the structure feel fragmented. To improve, focus on planning your essay into clear sections: an introduction, two body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and a conclusion. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'important', 'clean', and 'positivity'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'keep house and workplace hygiene', which should be 'keep the house and workplace hygienic'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to the topic, such as 'clutter-free environment', 'organizational efficiency', or 'mental clarity', rather than repeating the same simple adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'In this new era majority of individuals' lacks an article ('the'), and 'it is integral to keep house and workplace hygiene' is grammatically awkward. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the sentence fragments at the end of the text demonstrate a lack of control over sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of sentence structures, including complex sentences with subordinate clauses, and pay closer attention to articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement.
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