Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Introduction, lot of people saying that it is crucial to keep your house and work site clean and tidy and all things should organized and in the right place. I think it should be. which I will discuss in next paragraphs. In first paragraph I will explain why we should keep clean our house and in second why we should keep clean our work place.

To commence with it, the cleaning is important part of our life because it is effects to our physical and mental health. The tidy house play crucial role to protect our physical health. For example, when the house will clean the gems and insects can not entre in our house such as, mosquito and bees. These things can be reason of dangerous disease. So we can be protect from this by clean house. When the things will be organized, it will be good for our day or mood as well because the spread things can spoil our mood and we can be irritated when come to house from outside. If the things will managed properly on right place it will look good.

Furthermore, the work place should be clean because the clean workplace will motivate us to do hard work. The good environment of worksite is depend on cleaning. The organized things is also part of tidiness and it can save our time. For instance, at work site if we will keep our things on right place so we can keep remember them and whenever we need we use them with any wastage of time to find them.

To conclusion, It is important to keep clean home and workplace. it is good for our physical and mental health and it also can save our time and energy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion in favor of keeping homes and workplaces tidy. The ideas are relevant, focusing on physical/mental health at home and productivity at work. However, the development is somewhat basic. For instance, the argument about 'gems' (germs) and insects is a bit simplistic, and the explanation of workplace organization could be more deeply explored with more sophisticated examples. The introduction is also slightly meta-commentary-heavy rather than focusing on the topic itself. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your points with more nuanced reasoning and avoid outlining your essay structure in the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'To conclusion' to signal shifts in focus. However, the use of these devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'These things can be reason of dangerous disease', where the antecedent is slightly ambiguous. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring better flow between sentences would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. You rely on simple, repetitive words like 'clean', 'tidy', 'things', and 'good'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'effects to' instead of 'affects', 'entre' instead of 'enter', and 'spread things' instead of 'clutter'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or precise vocabulary limits the score. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations and avoid basic errors in word form and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('the tidy house play', 'the good environment... is depend'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing ('with any wastage of time'). While you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty, such as 'when the house will clean the gems and insects can not entre'. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures to ensure higher accuracy.

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