Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

To maintain tidiness in workplace and in home is important because it effect person ability to work ,health ,safety etc.

First and foremost cleanliness is crustal at workplace because it runes all works smoothly .suppose in office if our desk is net and clean all things are in proper place that prevent wasting of time for searching right thing .

If our sarrounding environment is in proper order and well maintained then it create positive impact on mind that automatically give effect on work qualities .

Likewise proper arrangement of all pdf in our computer system that prevent unnecessary difficulty in finding them

Over all to put everything in organized way and in there proper place and tidiness of surroundings leads to improvement in over all out come .

For me home tidiness is also crucial.there is one famous line that if our home is clean then god also like to stay in that house .

In some religion also like Islam they put more focus on clinlinessso this way this has also religious importance.

If we talk about for home ,in my opinion if we put all things in proper way and we make our hose clean then it protect us from some sort of decease also .and it improve health of all family members.

If our home is clean that provide stress free environment when someone return from their work place.if we observe all things in house are in uneven place that directly effect on our mind.if our kitchen is well organized than we loved cooking and it make easy cooking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of tidiness in both the home and workplace. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention benefits like time-saving and health, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-elaborated examples. The position is clear, but the supporting points are repetitive and rely on general statements rather than detailed analysis. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points with more specific scenarios or logical consequences, ensuring that each paragraph contributes significantly to the overall argument rather than restating the same ideas in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression between and within them is weak. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First and foremost' and 'Likewise', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. For instance, the transition between the workplace and home sections is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing is inconsistent, with some very short, underdeveloped paragraphs. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'crustal' (crucial), 'runes' (runs), 'net' (neat), 'sarrounding' (surrounding), and 'decease' (disease). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'organized' and 'environment', the range is insufficient to express complex ideas. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise collocations and academic terms relevant to the topic of organization and productivity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it effect person ability'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'tidiness of surroundings leads to improvement in over all out come'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing spaces after periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex structures.

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