Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Ceanliness should be the priority of every individual. I strongly believe that your surrounding should be neat either it is your workplace or home. If your space is tidy as well as everything is sorted in an organised way it feel so pleasant.

Once i was hostilite, I was doing my masters degree from islamabad. At that time, i have 2 room mates. One is extreamly organised, who organised her soace so well like her wadribe, her book shelves even though her area. While on the other hand, Other room mate is so untidy, no manners who to organise. So basically at that time, I feel that it's crucial to be seen neat and organised.

I am fond of humans which are disciplined. Furthermore, I would prefervto be around which smells good and keep the surrounding tidy. Obviously, If we meet to kind of people who is so well organised and one who is clumsy. we would always preffer the one who is excellent in tidiness.

In an era which we're living we meet people in daily basis either for work or daily meetups with friends. So, we vibe with one who is well in communication skill as well as who is clean and smell well. I believe it is paramount of wellbeing of healthy society, if we don't clean ourself we get alot of germs and it leads to a lot of dieases. So save our lives, we should be prioritize our health. health comes first and if you untidy it could not be possible to become healthy.

In conclusion, It is paramount for our health to keep ourselves tidy. If you organise your self it is good for you. Both are crucial for living a pleasant life. It's our moral duty to keep ourself and our surrounding clean for a better future as well as better lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The candidate addresses all parts of the task by stating a clear personal opinion on the importance of keeping a tidy home and workplace, supporting it with reasons and a personal example about university roommates. The position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is sometimes limited and occasionally wanders into tangential points, such as general hygiene and avoiding diseases, rather than strictly focusing on organization and tidiness as requested by the prompt. While the main ideas are relevant and supported, the depth of exploration corresponds to a Band 6.0 level as some points remain slightly under-developed or simplistic in their progression.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction and concluding with a summary. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions and a lack of smooth cohesive ties between sentences. For instance, moving from discussing roommates straight into human preferences ('I am fond of humans which are disciplined') feels disjointed. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, and cohesive devices are somewhat mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Obviously', 'In conclusion'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion faults prevent the response from achieving a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 5.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for the general topic, including words like 'organised', 'disciplined', 'crucial', and 'paramount'. However, there are numerous spelling mistakes ('Ceanliness', 'surrounding' instead of surroundings, 'hostilite', 'extreamly', 'soace', 'wadribe', 'prefervto', 'dieases') and frequent word choice or collocation errors ('smell well', 'meet to kind of people', 'vibe with one', 'if you untidy'). These lexical inaccuracies are noticeable and occasionally cause mild strain for the reader, which aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The candidate attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as conditional clauses ('If your space is tidy...') and relative clauses. However, control over grammar is weak, with persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('At that time, i have 2 room mates'), missing articles ('One is extreamly organised'), incorrect verb forms ('we should be prioritize'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. These frequent errors impede smooth reading and demonstrate a lack of consistent grammatical control, making Band 5.0 the most accurate assessment.

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