Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Individuals focus to be meticulous regarding to their surroundingthings: home or work place. Many people believe that, everyone should keep neat and clean of their living as well as working area. Here, I am totally agree with this point of view as I am being punctual person since I become a mature one.
Keep everything organise and in the correct place in our house or work area would be better for our heath in a different ways: concentration- individual gets excited to do work or stay home, healthy- free from illness, infection or fever, energetic- everytime atmosphere feels like energetic and attractive, and manymore. Moreover, other colleague or visitors are getting attracted and felt happy by seeing everything organised our living area. For instance, some people with an OCD- Obsessive Compulsive Disorder are always enthusiastic with every sigle details of their surrounding, even they do not like non organised things, infect they keen to make everything organise not only on their place but also keep organise others works or place as well.
Moreover, organising our surrounding place give positive engery. It motivates every individuals positively for working with full of concentration. Additionally, keeping clean house can reduce medical problems, because if we are cleaing our house regularly, then there are less chances to keep coming small insects inside the house: Ant, Bee, and Fly. Furthermore, proper organised of surrounding place would help to keep mind positive. As there is mentioned by one of the philosphers in the book related to peace, which is keep clean inside as well as outside of human's body to get a peace, happiness and relax in life.
In conclusion, I am fully agree with the point of view that keep organise and well manage our working as well as living area, which would make human so positive and also keep it healthy to everyone.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a personal position in favour of keeping homes and workplaces tidy. The candidate provides some relevant ideas, such as the psychological benefits of order, productivity boosts, and hygiene advantages like reducing insects. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and occasionally relies on listing points rather than fully explaining them, as seen in phrases like 'concentration- individual gets excited... healthy- free from illness...'. The mention of OCD as an example is a bit tangential, as it medicalises the general habit of tidiness. Nevertheless, all parts of the task are addressed with a clear overarching position maintained throughout, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, featuring an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore' are used to link paragraphs and ideas, though their usage can feel somewhat mechanical. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the body paragraphs is occasionally disjointed, relying on hyphenated lists rather than fluid, connected prose. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for instance, 'others works or place as well'. Overall, the arrangement provides a coherent framework, but the execution of logical progression and cohesive ties points firmly to a Band 5.5 or Band 6 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and displays noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation. Examples include 'surroundingthings', 'meticulous regarding to', 'keep neat and clean of', and 'every sigle details'. While the candidate attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'punctual person' and 'enthusiastic', inaccuracies occur frequently, such as 'positive engery' and 'philosphers'. The range is minimally adequate for the task, but frequent slips in spelling and lexical collocation restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures frequently contain grammatical errors. Examples of structural and grammatical inaccuracies include 'Individuals focus to be meticulous', 'everyone should keep neat and clean of their living', 'as I am being punctual person since I become a mature one', and 'proper organised of surrounding place would help'. Punctuation is also erratic, with colon usage employed incorrectly for lists. These frequent errors in grammar and tense consistency can cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
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