Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is certainly true that keeping house neat and clean is approperiate way to mantain the things in right way. it is considered by several individuals that remain house and work area tidy,and i also believe this approach is better for individuals living.
To commence with keep house cleaning causes. first, it is good to make good impression in front of guests.In other words , if individual organise their household things then this things look more attractive and pleasent, which friends and realtive give compliment to their house and their organzing skills.Moreover, by keeping house clean, people can escape from numerious diseases which can happen because of dirty house.Hence, they can live healthy.Furthermore, they can find things without wasting too much time for searching things from the house corners.because of organizing things in the right place.
Moving futher, people can get more profit if they keep their workplace more tidy.For exmple. a recent news by "The Times Of India" publishered that majority of cutomers attract to that shops which looks clean and attractive . Owing to this, shopkeepers earn lots of money. In addition, it becomes easy for shoppers to find products because of keeping things in their place without creating any mess they can sale items to clients.Apart from this, this approch also good to remain work safe from accidents.For instance, if workshops equipments are not keep their right place then the chances of injuries with workers may be increase.So tidyness important for workplace.
To sum up,although it is hard to organise things in the crrect place because people have to use time, energy and money for this procedure but its compulary for house and shops for healthy and wealthy lifestyle.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of keeping a home and workplace tidy, presenting a clear position that cleanliness is beneficial for health, impression, and efficiency. Main ideas are present, such as avoiding diseases, finding items easily, and attracting customers in a shop environment. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on workplaces mentions customer attraction and accident prevention, but the explanations remain brief and lack deeper elaboration. Examples provided are general rather than fully fleshed out. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the overall depth aligns best with Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into clear paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs for the home and workplace respectively, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used throughout, such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', 'Moving futher', and 'To sum up'. However, some of these cohesive links and referencing are mechanical or awkward, and punctuation errors around conjunctions disrupt the flow. For example, sentences often lack proper spacing after commas or periods, which affects readability. Paragraphing is attempted adequately, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from abrupt transitions. Therefore, a score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate basic ideas about tidiness, health, and business benefits. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'compliment', 'numerious diseases', and 'organizing skills', but there are numerous spelling and word choice errors, including 'approperiate', 'mantain', 'numerious', 'publishered', 'cutomers', 'attract' (instead of attracted), 'sale' (instead of sell), 'approch', and 'compulary'. These lexical errors are frequent, though they rarely impede overall communication, placing the response firmly at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some attempt at subordination and relative clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'keeping house cleaning causes', 'if individual organise', 'workshops equipments are not keep their right place', and missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences. Punctuation is also poorly managed, with missing spaces after punctuation marks and misused commas. These frequent errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptors.
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