Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, some people say it is very crucial to keep your home and workplace clean,Like everything organised and in the correct place.

In abroad its is very tough the clean our home and workplace clean and also all thing placed on correct place some of people say this but my opinion is we have to clean our home and workplace and also organised everythink and in the correct place because if we do not clean our home and workplace and all thing are not place on correct place we feel negtivety vibe and stress in our mind. when we are in our workplace like if the company manager make a video call or visit in person at our workplace regarding to talk about our bussiness contract and also about our work if they see the messyness and dirtyness at our workplace its was very bad impact and they never give you another job contract. And also if we do not place everythink on correct place so when we have go urgently in where we do not find the important think at the time

For example, I remember that last week i was at my home my manager call me and say immediately come to the office with your project docomant and i do not place my docoment on correct place and i am find my docomant its take more time like 30 minutes because of the this extra time i miss my bus and i arrive last and i feel very embrasse. and that day i start organised everythink on correct place and clear my home and workplace.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that homes and workplaces should be tidy and organised. You give relevant reasons, including reducing stress, making a professional impression, and finding important documents quickly. The personal example about searching for your project document supports your view and shows how disorganisation can have practical consequences. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for instance, the claim that a manager would never offer another contract could be qualified or supported. The response addresses the main question, but the discussion of why tidiness matters at home is less developed than the workplace example. Extending each reason with a clearer explanation would make the argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a generally understandable sequence: you state your opinion, give reasons, and then provide a personal example. Connectors such as “because,” “and also,” and “For example” help show how ideas relate. However, most of the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the shift from general reasons to the personal example is not clearly signposted. Several ideas are joined in lengthy sentences, making the progression harder to follow, and repeated phrases such as “correct place” and “home and workplace” make the links feel mechanical. Use separate paragraphs for your position and reasons, then your example and conclusion, and vary linking expressions while keeping each sentence focused on one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “organised,” “stress,” “workplace,” and “project document,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “everythink,” “correct place,” and “clean.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “negtivety vibe,” “messyness,” “dirtyness,” and “embrasse,” which make parts of the response less clear or natural. Some combinations are awkward, for example “very bad impact” and “regarding to talk.” Build a wider set of accurate phrases for describing order, professionalism, and consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, so there is some variety in structure. Your main opinion and the basic sequence of events are usually understandable. However, errors in sentence construction and verb forms occur in several places, such as “In abroad its is very tough the clean” and “i am find my docomant.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and tense consistency, as in “its was very bad impact” and the shift between “I was,” “my manager call,” and “I miss.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, especially where several clauses run together. Practise forming shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using clauses such as “because” and “when.”

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