Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that there are a number of individuals who believe that it is significant to keep your house and organisation tidy with everything organised and in an accurate place. I agree with this statement.

To begin with, keeping clean home is make life healthier. If people will clean their house daily and they can live healthy life. For example, the majority of people do not hygiene and they have some chronic diseases. Due to this, they are spending money on medicens. Moreover, luxury lifestyle is good key of tidiness. whether some people like to live in good sorroundings or some are not. Thus, the neat and clean house is looking better than other houses.

Furthermore, maintaining tidy in organisation is very necessary to achive the goals. If workplace is not very clean then people do not like to do work, also no more customers coming there. For example, people like to go in shopping malls and the restaurants for enjoying. If that places are not tidy then people not like to go there. As a result, organisations can not gain profits.

The last year survey showed that 85% of people who affected by disease due to unhygienic food which was prepared in the dirty kitchen of the restaruant.

In my opinion, government should start awareness campus not only urban areas but also in rural areas. Also, teachers should learn to students about the benefits of cleaning sorroundings.

To conclude, although people are becoming tidy in these days, some people are unaware who are not educated or living in rural areas so that government should aware to people by organizing some seminars to keep tidy both home and workplace.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I agree with this statement”), and you address both the home and workplace aspects with relevant points about health, comfort, customer experience and business profits. The restaurant example also gives a concrete illustration of why cleanliness matters. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained: the link between a tidy home and a “luxury lifestyle” is unclear, and the claim about people with chronic diseases does not clearly show how tidiness prevents them. The final recommendations about government campaigns and teachers introduce a related but different focus, and their connection to your main argument could be made more explicit. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and a specific, credible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on the home and workplace, recommendations, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are joined without clear logical links. For instance, the move from health to “luxury lifestyle” is abrupt, while the survey sentence appears after the workplace paragraph’s conclusion rather than being integrated into the example. The conclusion also repeats the awareness-campaign idea without clearly summarising the main reasons. Use clearer links between claims and evidence, and keep each paragraph focused on one developed point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tidy,” “hygienic,” “chronic diseases,” “customers,” and “profits,” so the reader can generally understand your subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “accurate place,” “luxury lifestyle is good key of tidiness,” and “awareness campus.” Spelling errors, including “medicens,” “sorroundings,” “achive,” and “restaruant,” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use more precise phrases for cleanliness and organisation, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a home as “well organised” and explain that a clean workplace can create a “welcoming environment” for customers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer conditional or subordinate structures, as in “If workplace is not very clean then people do not like to do work.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Examples include “keeping clean home is make life healthier,” “If people will clean their house daily and they can live healthy life,” and “teachers should learn to students.” These involve problems with verb forms, sentence construction, articles and prepositions. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add a reason or condition. For example: “If people clean their homes regularly, they can reduce health risks.”

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