Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

IT IS VERY NECESSAR FOR ALL TO KEEP THE PLACE CLEAN AND ORGANISED WHERE THEY LIVE OR SPENT ALOT OF TIME FOR THEIR WORK.I HAVE STRONG OPINION WHICH SUPPORTS THE STATEMENT TRUE ENOUGH.

THE HOME WE ARE LIVING AND THE PLACE WHERE WE WORK IS DIRECTLY CONNECTED TO OUR DAILY ROUTINE. A CLEAN,ORGANISED PLACE KEEPS OUR MIND FRESH AND CREATES THE ENVIRONMENT SUITABLE FOR WORK OR REST.FOR EXAMPLE- IF THE WORKPLACE ARE DECORATED OR WELL VENTILATED THE EMPLOYEERS ARE MUCH MORE ENERGETIC THAN THEY USED TO BE.THAT DOES NOT MEAN THAT WE NEED LUXUROIS FURNITURE OR UTENSILS TO ORGANISE THE PLACE ,EVEN A SMALL AMOUNT OF FRESHNER WITH NICE AROMA CAN BE USED TO CREATE A SUITABLE INVIRONMENT.BESIDES ONE CAN USE BOOKS OR HAND PAINTED ARTS TO MAKE MORE ELIGENT.

CLEANNESS IS NOT ABOUT FOR MENTAL SATISFACTION ,HOWEVER IT HAS A DIRECT LINK TO AVOID GERMS AND DISEASES LIKE FLU OR ALLERGY.FOR INTANCES ,A GERM FREE HOME AND WORKING PLACE BOTH MIGHT BE NECESSARY FOR A WORKING MOTHER TO PROTECT HIS CHILD FROM GETTING SICK.CONGESTED ENVIRONMENT CAN INCREASE THE CHANCE OF GETTING DEPRESSED,MOOD SWINGS AND PHYSICAL DISABILITY.

THOUGH PEOPLE ARE GETTING CONCIOUS ABOUT THIS MATTER, STATISTICS HAVE BEEN SHOWN,THAT THE CITY PEOPLE ARE MUCH MORE CONCIOUS THAN THE RURAL PEOPLE AND KEEP THEIR HOME FRESH,TIDY AND STARTED USING ARTIFICIAL PLANTS TO BE MORE REAL.

IN CONCLUSION WHETHER IT IS AN APARTMENT OR RENTED HOME OR WORKPLACE ,EVERY SINGLE PLACE NEEDS TO BE CLEAN AND VIVID.IT HAS A POTENTIAL SIGNIFICANCE ON HUMAN MIND AND BODY

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you strongly support keeping homes and workplaces clean and organised. You give relevant reasons, including a more positive working environment and protection from germs, and the example of a working mother protecting her child helps make the health point concrete. The response therefore addresses the question and gives supporting ideas. However, some points are less fully explained: the suggestions about freshener, books and artwork focus on decoration rather than organisation, and the claim about city and rural residents is introduced without evidence or explanation. Develop each main reason more directly and show how tidiness, not simply cleanliness or decoration, supports your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs giving reasons, and a concluding statement. Connectors such as “For example,” “Besides,” “Though,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is sometimes uneven. The paragraph about a suitable work environment moves from ventilation to air freshener and artwork, while the later statistics claim about city and rural residents appears abruptly and is not linked clearly to the earlier arguments. Some connections are also mechanical, and the contrast introduced by “Though” is not fully developed. Group related points together, use clearer links between claims and examples, and make sure each paragraph advances one main reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “organised,” “ventilated,” “germs,” “depressed,” and “mood swings.” These choices show an effort to express ideas beyond basic statements. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the intended meaning less clear: “necessar,” “luxurois,” “conscious,” and “vivid” are examples, while “artificial plants to be more real” is an unclear phrase. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “creates the environment suitable for work or rest.” Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases. Prefer precise, familiar wording when an ambitious expression does not communicate your meaning clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “if the workplace…” and a relative clause in “the place where we work.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, there are some errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “the workplace are” has a subject–verb agreement problem, and “protect his child” does not agree with “a working mother.” The opening also runs several sentences together, and “Cleanliness is not about for mental satisfaction” has an incorrect grammatical pattern. Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; use full stops and commas to separate ideas clearly.

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