Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, everybody has a job or some type of occupation in which they are doing a work so numerous people believe thats to maintain the work place and home clean is significant role in our life. In this eassy i will give my opinion with example

firstly, having a job is good thing and to preform a job daily with hard work is an art of life. Everything is going well in both home and working place if we set the things in proper way like in work place we have to clean our offfice chair and the area around us and then we have to organise the iteams which are on the table it is exceptional for us whatever we want during the we can just take it. Instance if we settle our working gadgets accrodingly in our office with this simple method we can get the chance of pormotion

secondly, home is crucial part of our life we are all living in homes from our childhood. And whenever we go we have to comeback to our home so folks believe that keeping a home clean is vital and all the home acesories we have to set up in proper way it is good for us its a helpful in some bad conditions when we want something in the house in the cause of emergency is we can get the things on time. For example, some kids are playing in the living area of home if they get a little injury and the if the med kit present in lounge's cabin so we quickly get the kit from there and heal the the children in this way we can save of alot of blood on time everything well organised is compulsory in both homes and offices

According to my prespective, we have to set the things like furniture and electronics things in home on proper places for safety and cleaness and also in job places we have to pay attention to our working tools and to set them in order while working or doing a job with these simple habits we can enhance our charcter in life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you support keeping both workplaces and homes organised, and you address both settings with relevant reasons. The workplace example explains that arranging tools makes them easier to find, while the home example links an organised first-aid kit to responding quickly to a child’s injury. These details make the response relevant to the question. However, some points are less fully developed: the claim that organisation can bring a “chance of promotion” is asserted without explaining how, and the final paragraph mostly repeats earlier ideas about safety and order. To strengthen the response, explain the practical benefits more precisely and extend each main reason with a clear consequence or personal example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the workplace and home, and a concluding opinion. The sequence from work to home is easy to follow, and “firstly,” “secondly,” and “According to my perspective” signal the main stages. However, the linking is sometimes mechanical, and several sentences run together, particularly in the home paragraph, where the first-aid example and concluding claim are not clearly separated. Some references are also unclear, such as “whatever we want during the we can just take it.” Use full stops to mark distinct ideas, and connect examples to their reasons with more precise transitions. This would make the progression smoother and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “organise,” “working tools,” “emergency,” and “first-aid kit.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “crucial part” and “chance of promotion.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow: “preform a job,” “home acesories,” and “save of alot of blood” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “eassy,” “offfice,” and “accrodingly” are noticeable. Build a more reliable range of phrases for cleanliness, organisation, and safety, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “if” and “whenever,” and your main message is generally understandable. However, complex sentences are often not controlled successfully, and errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and verb forms recur. For example, “everybody has a job … in which they are doing a work” has an awkward clause and article use, while “if they get a little injury and the if the med kit present” contains a faulty conditional structure and missing verb. Several sentences also join multiple complete ideas without appropriate punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause, then proofread for articles, verb forms, and full stops.

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