Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Through different forms of print and digital media we come across reports that nowadays people are always want to make and keep their house and professional place clean and try to keep everything managed. There is a widespread controversy in this matter. After close scrutiny of this phenomenon I completely agree.

My stand can be justified with multiple obeservations. The most convincing reason is that people do not want to waste their time for finding objects. This view exists as an individual always try to keep their things on a perfect place. As a reasult, they can find things when they needed. In addition to this, people have some craving to look good in front of everyone. This hypothesis is based on the fact that we are very curious about how we and our place look, we are always try to make it perfect. Hence, people or seniors who going through your desk they give compliments to you.

Not only these, sometimes people are very excited to make their place very clean because they have some Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder, in this people feel trouble to live with unorganised place. So, they are always go for making place clean and organised. According to recent research in this matter, people who make their place clean and organised they can save more time and use behind productive work.

To conclude, I can say that everyone will have sense about cleanliness and like and live in clean place and give importance to make their place organised. It is recommended that people should always make their place clean on regular basis so we can finally make our country clean and get number in clenest countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you completely agree that homes and workplaces should be kept tidy, and you give relevant reasons, including saving time and creating a positive impression. The example of people receiving compliments at work helps connect the argument to everyday experience. However, the reasons are not developed equally. The point about appearance is explained mainly through a general claim, while the reference to obsessive-compulsive disorder is introduced briefly and risks shifting attention from ordinary benefits of organisation. The claim about research is also unsupported by a specific example. To strengthen the response, explain each main reason with a concrete situation and show more directly how it supports your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from practical benefits to personal preferences and then to a final recommendation. Linking phrases such as “In addition to this,” “Not only these,” and “To conclude” make the stages visible. However, some connections feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “Not only these” does not smoothly introduce the next point, and the shift from disorder to a claim about research is abrupt. References such as “this view” and “this hypothesis” are not always precise. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example explicitly to its main point, and vary transitions so the organisation feels more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “widespread controversy,” “close scrutiny,” “productive work,” and “Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder.” These choices show an effort to use less common language, but several are inaccurate or unnatural in context: “widespread controversy” does not clearly describe the issue, and “craving to look good” is an awkward collocation for this argument. Spelling errors such as “obeservations,” “reasult,” and “clenest” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases, including “make their place clean,” are repeated rather than expressed more precisely. Prioritise natural collocations and accurate spelling, and choose vocabulary that communicates the point directly rather than sounding overly formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason-and-result structure with “As a result” and a subordinate clause beginning “because.” However, errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction occur often enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include “people are always want,” “an individual always try,” and “they are always go.” There are also problems with clause structure in “Hence, people or seniors who going through your desk they give compliments to you.” Work on choosing one correct verb form, matching subjects and verbs, and building complete clauses. Practising accurate simple sentences before adding subordinate clauses will improve clarity and control.

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