Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my interest in a job that was posted in an Australian magazine. I am willing to work as a caretaker of your six-year-old child for six months. Currently, I am working as a personal support worker for old-aged home in the Tesla company. My tendure is about to end this month. So I am actively looking for an opportunity.

I believe that I am a good candidate for this job because my qualification and experience is in the same field. I have completed my graduation in childhood program and working in this profession for 6 years. Therefore, I am competitive candidate for this job.

I am very open-minded and social person and I would love to spend my free time in the public parks and gardens because I can get an opportunity to meet different people from our society. I also love to play indooe games with my cousins and watch late night movies with them.

Please feel free to ask me if you have any questions. I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you

Kind regards,

Vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that your current job is ending, describe relevant childcare education and six years of experience, and mention parks, gardens, games, and films as ways to spend your free time. These details make your application relevant. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, you say your qualification and experience are in the same field, but do not explain what duties or skills from your work would help you care for a six-year-old. Your leisure plans are also somewhat general, and playing games or watching films with your cousins may not be realistic while living in Australia. Add a specific example of your childcare abilities and clarify how you would pursue these interests there.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening that states your purpose, a paragraph about your suitability, a paragraph on free-time plans, and a polite closing. The progression is easy to follow, and phrases such as “Therefore” and “I look forward to hearing from you” help connect ideas and signal the letter’s stages. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, links between ideas are occasionally mechanical: “My tenure is about to end this month. So I am actively looking” could be combined or connected more smoothly. The shift from your work history to your qualifications could also be better signposted. Use a wider range of natural transitions and ensure each paragraph develops one connected point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the application and your plans, including “express my interest,” “qualification,” “experience,” and “open-minded.” The meaning is generally clear, and you attempt some less common or formal expressions. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “old-aged home,” “competitive candidate,” and “childhood program.” There are also spelling errors, including “tendure” and “indooe,” which reduce precision. Aim for more natural phrases used in applications and childcare contexts, and proofread carefully for spelling. More precise vocabulary for relevant duties—such as supervising, preparing activities, or supporting a child’s development—would also make your suitability more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some longer structures, including “I believe that I am a good candidate for this job because…” and “because I can get an opportunity…”. Most ideas remain understandable, and the letter includes a range of sentence purposes. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “my qualification and experience is,” the subject requires a plural verb, while “I have completed my graduation … and working” needs parallel verb forms. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “I am very open-minded and social person.” Review agreement, articles, and consistent verb forms, then check each sentence for a complete and natural structure. Greater accuracy in these areas would strengthen the control shown in your varied sentences.

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