Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I am interested in taking care of your six-year-old son fix months. I have no concern in living with your family.

I just have finished my studies due to which now I am eligible for full time employment. Therefore, currently, I am looking for temporary employment; so, I would be able to manage my all my living expenses.

I have finished two years Early Childhood Education diploma from University of Sydney, providing me opportunity to learn about the various stages of growth of a child. Besides this, I learned there how to treat with them and how we can assist them in growing well. Moreover, I am keen of spending time with children. I remember when my niece was little how enjoyful days that were when I loved spending most of my time with her and taking care of her. That is why, I believe I would be an appropriate care taker for your child.

When it comes to spending leisure time, I will prefer making a phone call my family members because I really love them and they are worried about me as I am alone in this foreign nation. Apart from this, I am a bibliophile who can spend hours in reading books; I would do so. Even sometimes I would enjoy going outside in park as it will give me chance to get some fresh air.

I hope you will consider my application.

Yours sincerely,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the prompt: you explain that you want temporary work, describe your Early Childhood Education diploma and experience with your niece, and outline how you would spend your free time. The reasons for employing you are the strongest part because your training is relevant to caring for a six-year-old. Your motivation for the job is less fully explained: managing living expenses is a practical reason, but you could also say what appeals to you about living with a family or caring for their child. The leisure-time details are relevant, though the plan to call family and read is more specific than your brief mention of going to a park. The letter is clear and covers the task, but some ideas need further development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: you introduce your interest, explain your circumstances, present your suitability, and then discuss leisure activities. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these distinct points, and links such as “Therefore,” “Besides this,” and “Apart from this” make relationships between ideas clear. The sequence within the suitability paragraph is also understandable, moving from formal training to personal experience. Some transitions feel mechanical, however, and the repeated use of additive connectors makes the paragraph read like a list. You could improve flow by linking the diploma directly to the practical skills you describe, and by varying transitions or using clearer references between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the letter and attempt some less common vocabulary, including “Early Childhood Education,” “stages of growth,” and “bibliophile.” These choices help communicate your qualifications and interests, although some are not used naturally. Phrases such as “I have no concern in living with your family,” “keen of spending time,” and “enjoyful days” show imprecise word choice or collocation. “Taking care of” is clear, but “care taker” is not the natural form for this role. Spelling is generally understandable, though “fix months” is an error. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than choosing unusually formal or uncommon words where a simpler expression would be more idiomatic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using structures such as “due to which” and “because,” and the overall meaning remains clear. However, some errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms reduce accuracy. For example, “I just have finished my studies” has an awkward verb form, while “I would be able to manage my all my living expenses” has incorrect word order and a repeated determiner. In “I will prefer making a phone call my family members,” the verb pattern and sentence structure are incomplete. There are also issues with articles and prepositions, as in “going outside in park.” Review verb patterns, word order, and article use, then proofread each sentence for a complete and accurate structure.

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