Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hi, I hope you are doing well. I am writting in regard to your recent advertisment for a job to look after your six year old child and to live with your family for a period of six months. I am a 60 year old single female living in Adelaide but my family lives in Melboure. I have an experience of serving as a nurse at a county hospital for more than 35 years. Currently, I babysit children on hourly basis. I really enjoy taking care of children. I prefer this job because it gives me a full time job along with limited travel for work. Therefore, I believe I can be a good match to your requirement. Apart from that, in my free time, I like to travel to visit my grandkids and children. I prefer visiting beaches and cafes with friends and family when I travel.

If interested, feel free to reach out to me for futher details.I look forward to your email.

Best regards,

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy caring for children, describe your nursing and babysitting experience, and mention visiting family, beaches and cafés in your free time. These details make your application relevant, and your experience as a nurse is a useful reason to consider you. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, you say you are a good match but do not explain how your nursing skills or current babysitting work would help you care for a six-year-old. The reason that the job offers “limited travel for work” is also unclear and does not strongly explain your motivation. Add specific examples of child-care skills and clarify why living with this family appeals to you.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally clear order: it introduces the advertisement, gives personal and work background, explains your interest, and ends with free-time plans and a polite closing. This makes the main information easy to follow. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, so the shift from your qualifications to your motivation and then to leisure activities is not clearly signposted. Some linking phrases, such as “Therefore” and “Apart from that,” connect ideas, but the relationships between them are not always precise. Use separate paragraphs for your application and suitability, and for your free-time plans. This would make the progression clearer and reduce the sense of ideas being joined mechanically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including relevant terms such as “babysit,” “nurse,” and “look after.” However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, for example “writting,” “advertisment,” “Melboure,” and “futher.” Some phrases are also unnatural or vague: “I have an experience of serving as a nurse” and “limited travel for work” do not express your meaning clearly. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language about your childcare experience, such as the ages of children you have cared for or the responsibilities you have handled, would also demonstrate a wider and more flexible vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of your meaning remains clear. For instance, “I have an experience of serving as a nurse at a county hospital for more than 35 years” communicates a long work history, while “when I travel” adds detail to your leisure plans. Some grammatical choices need attention, including the article and noun construction in “I have an experience,” and the phrasing “on hourly basis,” which needs an article. The sentence beginning “I prefer this job because…” is understandable, but its reason is not clearly expressed. Review articles and sentence construction, and use a wider range of accurate complex sentences to explain how your experience makes you suitable.

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