Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my keen interest for the post of care taker that I have seen in an advertisement in Australian Magazine.

I love to work with kids as I have many years experience of dealing with young kids and want to explore the living style and culture of Austalian family too. As i have recently moved to Australia so i need job for financial sattlement of my family experience. I believe that this job really suits my experience as I have experience of looking after kids, i better understands their needs and can engage tem in many productive way. I also have certificates of experience of working with young kids. I can provide if it is required.

During my stay to Australia in free time, I plan to explore natural places that provide peace and relaxing environment.

I hope you will consider my application and soon will give me the chance to serve you.

Yours Faithfully

ANA SAM

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy working with children and want to experience Australian family life, describe your childcare experience and certificates, and mention exploring natural places in your free time. These details make the letter relevant and the purpose clear. However, some points are not fully developed. For example, “many years experience” is not supported with a specific example of your responsibilities or how you would care for a six-year-old. The reason about needing a job for your family’s “financial sattlement” is also unclear and does not explain as directly why this particular role appeals to you. Add a concrete childcare example and clarify your motivation to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure: an opening that states your purpose, a paragraph about your suitability, a separate paragraph about free time, and a closing. The ideas are generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “As” and “During my stay” help signal relationships between them. However, the first two paragraphs contain several ideas crowded together, and the shift from wanting to experience Australian culture to needing work for financial reasons is abrupt. Some links are also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “experience.” Group your motivation separately from your qualifications, and use clearer transitions to show how each point connects. This would make the progression smoother and the cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “keen interest,” “looking after kids,” “certificates,” and “productive.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main points, but several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision. For example, “interest for the post” is less natural than “interest in the position,” while “financial sattlement of my family experience” is difficult to understand. “Australian Magazine” and “Austalian” also show inconsistent or inaccurate spelling and capitalisation. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check spelling carefully; replacing general wording with specific childcare terms would also make your qualifications clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason clause in “as I have many years experience” and the relative clause in “natural places that provide peace.” The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “I better understands” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “I can provide if it is required” is missing an object such as “them.” There are also problems with articles and prepositions, as in “in free time” and “stay to Australia.” Use a wider range of accurately controlled sentence patterns, and check agreement, articles, and prepositions when editing. These corrections would make the letter clearer and more polished.

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