Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I am interseted for the job that you posted in a magazine.

I like this job because I really like to spend time with kids and play with them. I have a niece and I spend most of my day with her. And I have a lot of attachment with babies.

I already completed my early childcare degree from New York and now I'm looking for job in this field. We were given training that how to feed babies, how change their diapers and how bath them. I think , I am suitable for thos position.

In my free time , I go to playground with my niece and play with her and her friends.On weekends, I usually organize a small party at home and invite my niece friends and cook food for them .

I am waiting for your reply .

Kind regards,

Taran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three requested points: you explain your interest in childcare, mention your early-childcare degree and training, and describe activities such as going to the playground and hosting parties. These details make the letter relevant. However, the reasons for wanting this particular six-month position are only briefly stated, and your suitability would be more convincing with specific examples of caring for your niece or explaining how your training prepares you to look after a six-year-old. The free-time section focuses mainly on your niece and does not say much about how you would spend time exploring or enjoying Australia. Develop these points more fully and make your purpose and qualifications clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: you introduce your application, explain your interest and qualifications, then describe your free time before closing. Paragraph breaks help the reader follow these main sections. Some connections between ideas are less smooth, however. For example, the repeated short statements about your niece are not clearly linked, and beginning a sentence with “And” makes the progression feel somewhat mechanical. The free-time paragraph also shifts from playground visits to parties without explaining the connection. Use a wider range of linking expressions and clearer references, and group related details so each paragraph develops one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas, with relevant terms such as “early childcare degree,” “training,” “feed,” and “diapers.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling or word-choice errors reduce precision. “Interseted for the job” is not a natural expression, while “a lot of attachment with babies” is unclear in this context. “Niece friends” also needs a more accurate phrase. Aim for natural collocations and more precise language about your experience and motivation; checking spelling carefully would also improve clarity. You can express the same ideas more effectively without relying repeatedly on “like” and “play.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate through mostly simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to combine ideas, such as “I have a niece and I spend most of my day with her.” However, errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter awkward. Examples include “looking for job” (missing an article), “how change their diapers” and “how bath them” (incomplete verb patterns), and “I am waiting for your reply” (an unnatural tense choice for this closing). Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and sentence boundaries. Practise accurate question-word clauses such as “how to change” and “how to bathe,” and vary sentence structures while checking articles and verb forms.

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