Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to infrom you that I have a keen interest in working with children. I am applying for the position advertised in your magazine for a live-in nanny to look after six year old child.

I would be interested in taking up this position because I would like to gain more experience with children and also working with children makes me feel relaxed, enjoying little moments and energetic all day. Moreover, I would like to spent my summer holidays by gaining some practical experience with children as this is my field of study.

Furthermore, I think I would be suitable for this job because this is my field of study, and two years of experience in this area. Although children sometimes behave differently, and i am patient when dealing with thrm. I am interesting to help with housechores also such as laundary, dishwashing, and meal prep for a child.

In addition, I would spend my leisure time exploring nearby cities and on shopping as I have a dream to travel Australia from the beginning.

Thank you for considreing me for this position. I would really appreciate it.

Yours faithfully ,

Asma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points in the task: you explain your interest in childcare, mention your studies and two years of experience, and describe plans to explore cities and shop. These details make the letter relevant and your purpose is clear. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, “gain more experience” and enjoying “little moments” explain your motivation only generally; a specific reason you want to work with this particular family would make it more convincing. Your suitability is supported by experience and patience, but a brief example of caring for a child would strengthen it. The free-time plan is also quite brief. Overall, the required information is present, though some ideas need clearer support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with the application, moves through your motivation and suitability, then mentions your free-time plans and closes politely. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these different points, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition” show how ideas relate. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger progression. However, the repeated formal connectors make the flow somewhat mechanical, and the first paragraph repeats the application purpose before the reasons are developed. The sentence beginning “Although children sometimes behave differently” is not smoothly connected to the following claim about patience. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect related details more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “live-in nanny,” “practical experience,” “patient,” and “leisure time.” There are also attempts to use more specific language about childcare and household duties. However, several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “infrom,” “thrm,” “laundary,” and “considreing.” Some combinations are also unnatural: “working with children makes me feel relaxed, enjoying little moments and energetic all day” and “I am interesting to help” do not express your meaning naturally. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the letter, but they limit precision and fluency. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for describing childcare experience and motivation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, using clauses introduced by “because,” “although,” and “as.” The overall meaning remains understandable, and the letter includes some controlled sentences, such as “Moreover, I would like to spent my summer holidays by gaining some practical experience with children as this is my field of study.” However, some grammatical errors remain. For example, “a live-in nanny to look after six year old child” needs an article, and “two years of experience in this area” is a sentence fragment after “I think I would be suitable.” The “Although” clause is also incomplete as written. Review articles, complete sentence structure, and verb forms, and punctuate the closing consistently. Greater accuracy in these areas would make your varied sentence attempts clearer.

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