Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in an Australian magazine regarding the childcare position for six months. I am very interested in this opportunity because I enjoy spending time with children and would love to gain valuable experience while living with your family.

I would like to apply for this position as I am friendly, patient and responsible am also enjoying educational games with children.Furthermore, i can help with homework ,reading and outdoor activities.

I will like spend my free time to visit famous tourist attractions,want to explore beautiful beaches and parks. I also would like to meet new people and make new friends and love to learn about Australian traditons and lifestyle.

Thank you for your time and consideration .Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Your sincerely,

Asma.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain your interest in childcare, describe relevant personal qualities and activities, and mention how you would use your free time in Australia. The opening also clearly identifies the advertised position. However, some points are only briefly stated. For example, “friendly, patient and responsible” would be more convincing if supported with a specific example of caring for a child, and your plans to visit attractions and beaches could be developed further. The response is also 14 words below the required minimum, so it needs more detail to meet the task fully. Expanding your experience and explaining how it would benefit the family would strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall structure: you introduce your purpose, describe your suitability, explain your leisure plans, and close politely. Each paragraph has a recognisable focus, and phrases such as “Furthermore” and “I also” help connect related ideas. The progression is easy to follow, although some links feel mechanical or are weakened by punctuation, as in “activities.Furthermore” and “consideration .Looking forward.” The suitability paragraph would flow more naturally if the qualities and childcare skills were connected in complete sentences. Keep the paragraph structure, but use punctuation consistently and add a little more explanation so that ideas develop smoothly rather than appearing as a list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “childcare position,” “educational games,” “homework,” and “tourist attractions.” These choices make your purpose and plans clear. However, the range is somewhat limited, and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “I will like spend,” “enjoying educational games,” and “learn about Australian traditons.” Spelling and word-form control also need attention, particularly in “traditons.” Aim for more precise phrases to describe your childcare experience and leisure plans, and check spelling before submitting. A wider range of natural collocations would make the letter sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple sentences and a longer sentence with “because,” and the main message remains understandable. Some grammatical errors occur, however, including the missing subject in “am also enjoying,” the incorrect construction “I will like spend,” and the sentence fragment “Looking forward to hearing from you soon.” There are also punctuation and capitalisation problems, such as the missing space after “activities.” and the lowercase “i.” These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your intentions, but they reduce accuracy. Practise forming complete sentences and using consistent verb patterns, for example, “I would like to spend my free time visiting…”

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