Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to see your advertisement in magazine.

Firstly, I would like this job, because i like the kids most. I also have a 3 year old kid and i would be handle how to manage 6 month old and 6 year old at the same time.

Additionally, I have an experience of child care. I am working atleast 3 year in this field. So, according to me, its a perfect job for me. I am very cheerful person.

Lastly, I spent a free time to reading a books listening music and play with children outdoor indoor games. So, it would be better and suitable job for me.

Thank you

I am looking forward to your answer.

Regards,

Harpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address all three bullet points: you say you want the role because you like children, mention childcare experience, and describe reading, listening to music and playing games in your free time. However, each point is only briefly covered, so the reasons and supporting details remain limited. The statement about managing “6 month old and 6 year old” is unclear and does not explain how your experience prepares you to care for this particular six-year-old. The response also contains 124 words, below the required 150, which leaves little room to develop your suitability and plans. Add specific examples, such as duties in your childcare work and activities you would enjoy in Australia, and make your motivation clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: motivation, experience and free-time plans, followed by a closing. “Firstly,” “Additionally,” and “Lastly” help signal these sections, and the reader can generally follow your main points. However, the progression feels mechanical because each paragraph is very short and the ideas are not developed or linked in much detail. The sentence beginning “So, according to me” repeats the claim that the job suits you rather than advancing the explanation. Use clearer paragraphing and connect each reason to the next with more natural transitions. A brief opening that identifies the advertised position, followed by fuller paragraphs and a polite closing, would make the letter flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic message, with relevant terms such as “child care,” “cheerful,” and “outdoor” games. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations sound unnatural or make the meaning less clear. For example, “see your advertisement in magazine” does not clearly express that you are responding to it, while “I like the kids most” is an imprecise way to explain your motivation. “A free time” and “reading a books” also show difficulty selecting natural expressions and forms. Build a more precise range for describing childcare experience, personal qualities and leisure plans, and check common word combinations before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate through mostly short, simple sentences and attempt some longer structures, such as “I would like this job, because…” and “I also have a 3 year old kid…”. However, the longer attempts are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “I would be handle how to manage” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “I spent a free time to reading” combines incompatible forms. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in lowercase “i.” Practise building accurate sentences with infinitives and gerunds, and check subject–verb agreement and articles. More reliable control of these patterns would let you express your ideas clearly while adding sentence variety.

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