Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

DEAR Sir or Madam,

My name is Ram. I have read about care taker for your a six month old.I think I can be a perfect fit for this opportunity.

Actully, I have completed my bachelor's in child psycology a year ago. Subsequently, I have got offer letter from the University of Sydney for Masters in child development and assessment.The university is luckly in the same city. Including that, I am also looking for a rental place and a part time job in any educational institution which can continuously keep me connected with my study and children.

I never raise any child in my life but I can can assure you that if I get the opportunity, I can manage to take care of kids. I also have two years of experience in Flower

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You begin to address the job’s suitability by mentioning your bachelor’s degree in child psychology and your planned master’s study, but the response does not adequately cover the task. Your reasons for wanting the position are only partly clear, and the free-time requirement is not answered. Suitability is also asserted rather than supported: “I never raise any child in my life” admits a lack of experience, while the unfinished reference to “two years of experience in Flower” does not explain relevant skills. The letter also stops before completing its final idea. The response is below the required 150 words, which limits how fully you can develop the three points. Add specific childcare-related qualities or examples and explain how you would spend your free time in Australia.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the letter: you introduce yourself, then discuss your studies and reasons for applying, and begin to address your suitability. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points. However, the progression is incomplete because the response ends abruptly at “two years of experience in Flower,” and there is no paragraph about your free time or a closing. Connections between ideas are also sometimes unclear; for example, “Including that” does not smoothly link your university plans to your search for accommodation and work. Use a clear paragraph for each task point, connect related ideas with straightforward transitions, and finish with a complete final paragraph and sign-off.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “child psychology,” “child development,” “part time job,” and “take care of kids.” This gives the reader a general sense of your background and plans. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or spellings make the message less clear or less natural, such as “care taker,” “perfect fit,” and “Flower” in the unfinished experience statement. “I can manage to take care of kids” is also vague and does not communicate specific childcare strengths. Choose precise terms for the role and your experience, and use vocabulary that describes practical qualities such as patience, responsibility, or supporting a child’s routine.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including “Subsequently, I have got offer letter from the University of Sydney for Masters in child development and assessment.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include “your a six month old,” “I have got offer letter,” and “I never raise any child in my life.” The repeated wording “I can can assure” also needs correction, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate articles and verb forms, and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb. Short, controlled sentences would help you communicate your ideas more clearly.

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