Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in context to the advertisement published in local Australian magazine regarding the need for a helper to look after the child.

I would like to iterate you that I have recently relocated to Australia and currently I am living alone. Hence, it would be a great opportunity for me to live with the native family and get well verse with the Australian culture.

I find myself highly suitable for this job as I already have 3 years of overseas experience in the same profession. That said, I also enjoy spending time and playing with kids.

Additionally, I would not bother you during my free time as my aunt lives in Australia so I can visit her during the weekends and holidays. Also, I have recently started by blogging channel, hence I would like to discover new places while living in Australia.

Hope to hear a positive response from your end at the earliest.

Yours sincerely,

Jagroop Ghuman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you want to experience Australian culture, mention three years of relevant experience and your enjoyment of children, and describe visiting your aunt and exploring places in your free time. These details make the letter relevant and give the parents a clear general picture of your motivation and suitability. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, you do not say what your three years of childcare work involved or give a specific example of how you would care for a six-year-old. The free-time plans are also brief. Add one or two concrete details about your childcare skills and activities you would enjoy, while keeping the focus on what you can offer the family.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with the purpose, then explains your motivation, suitability and free-time plans, before closing politely. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these different points, and connectors such as “Hence” and “Additionally” signal relationships between ideas. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, a few links feel mechanical or unclear. “That said” does not clearly introduce a contrast, and “Also” joins two separate free-time ideas without showing how they relate. The final request for a response is appropriate, but the transition into it could be smoother. Use connectors that express the precise relationship between ideas, and make each paragraph’s focus consistent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the letter, including relevant expressions such as “overseas experience,” “suitable for this job,” and “discover new places.” The meaning is generally clear, and you attempt more formal language. Some choices, however, are inaccurate or unnatural: “in context to” and “iterate you” do not express the intended meaning, while “get well verse” appears to be a mistaken form of “get well versed.” “Blogging channel” is also an unusual phrase in this context. These choices show that you are reaching for less common vocabulary, but collocation and word form are not always controlled. Prefer natural, precise expressions, such as “in response to your advertisement” and “inform you.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the reason-and-result structure in “Hence, it would be a great opportunity…” and the clause beginning “as my aunt lives in Australia.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, and the letter’s basic sentence boundaries are clear. Some grammatical errors remain, though they rarely prevent understanding. For example, “I have recently relocated to Australia and currently I am living alone” would be more natural with parallel placement of “currently,” and “I have recently started by blogging channel” has an incorrect possessive construction. The sentence beginning “Additionally” also combines several ideas in a way that makes the structure less controlled. Review articles, possessives and clause structure, and aim for a greater variety of accurate complex sentences.

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