Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to show my interest in a job which is taking care of your six year old child and residing with you for six months.

culture and et support from the family.

I would like this job because I have a strong interst in working with children and I believe this would be the wonderful opportunity for me to work with Australian

As I am a student and studying early childhood educator course in "Nelson University" in Australia.The duration of my course is three years and I am on my second year. According to the advertissement this job is related to my academics and I would love to gain more practical knowledge in this field.I also has First aid and CPR license which allows me to authority to take care of a child.

In Australia I would love to spend my time while exploring the Australian culture which helps me to expand my horizon regarding their culture and enhance my knowledge.Plus, I would planninfg to join some cookery classes which helps to improve my cooking skills.

Thank you for considering my application. a good response from your side is highly appriciated.

Regards,

Pardeep kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you explain that you enjoy working with children and want practical experience, mention your early-childhood studies and first-aid/CPR training, and describe exploring Australian culture and taking cookery classes. These details make your application relevant. However, some points are only briefly stated: for example, you do not explain what experience or qualities would help you care for a six-year-old, and your reasons for wanting to live with the family are not clearly developed. The sentence fragment about “culture and et support from the family” also makes part of your motivation difficult to understand. Develop each point with a specific example and make your suitability more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable opening, separate paragraphs for your motivation, studies and free time, and a closing, so the reader can identify its main sections. However, progression is uneven: the fragment “culture and et support from the family” appears between the opening and your explanation, interrupting the flow. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, such as “Plus” and the repeated use of “which helps.” The final thanks and request for a response are separated awkwardly by a full stop. Organise the ideas into a clear sequence—motivation, evidence of suitability, then free-time plans—and use linking phrases that show the relationship between ideas without repeating the same pattern.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “practical knowledge,” “First aid and CPR,” “Australian culture,” and “cookery classes.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but errors in spelling, word form and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make the message less clear. Examples include “interst,” “advertissement,” “appriciated,” and “expand my horizon”; “authority to take care of a child” is also an unnatural phrase. Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise wording about your childcare experience and personal qualities would also help you express your suitability with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, for example, “I would like this job because…” and “According to the advertissement this job is related to my academics.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence-level errors make parts of the letter difficult to follow. “I also has” should use the correct subject–verb form, while “I would planninfg to join” has an incorrect verb construction. The sentence beginning “As I am a student” is joined to the next sentence without appropriate punctuation, and “I am on my second year” uses an incorrect preposition. Review verb forms, sentence boundaries, and articles, then proofread each sentence to ensure its structure is complete.

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