Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir/Madam

I would like to apply for the position you have advertised in Australian magazine for hiring a person to stay at your home to take care of your child.

Actually, two years ago,I have completed my course in child care and since then i have been working as care giver in the house to take care of six months baby.However, they do not need care giver any more, I would like to come abroad to take care of your child and opportunity to work abroad would be beneficial for me in future.

As,i have two years of experience in child care,on top

of that,I am not married, so residing at your home

will not put much burden on your family.

Owing to aforementioned reason,I would like to works as care giver for your child.Futhermore, in my spare time i could help in your hosue hold activities and my studies in Bed could also help to give tution to your child in free time.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon.

kind regards,

Deepak sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by applying for the childcare position and giving reasons, including your childcare course and two years of experience. However, the task is only partially covered: your suitability is supported with limited detail, and the point about how you would spend your free time in Australia is not clearly answered. Offering to help with household activities and tutor the child describes work-related contributions rather than your own leisure plans. The reason that working abroad would benefit your future is relevant, but the letter would be more convincing if you explained your interest in caring for this particular child and gave a specific example of your experience. Make each requested point explicit and develop it with relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable application structure: you introduce the job, explain your background, and close with a request for a reply. Some sequencing is understandable, but the middle paragraphs combine several ideas without a clear progression. For example, your marital status is placed alongside your experience, while the final paragraph moves from wanting the job to household help and tutoring. Connectives such as “on top of that,” “owing to aforementioned reason,” and “furthermore” are used, but they do not always make the relationship between ideas clear and can feel mechanical. Use separate paragraphs for your motivation, suitability, and free-time plans, and make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “position,” “child care,” “experience,” and “opportunity to work abroad.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “owing to aforementioned reason,” though this sounds unnatural in context. Noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “care giver” is better expressed as “caregiver” or “childcare worker,” “residing at your home” is awkward, and “tution” and “hosue hold” are misspelled. “Bed” is also unclear to an international reader unless you explain the qualification. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than formal-sounding expressions, and proofread spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “since then” and a sentence starting “Owing to…”. However, errors are frequent, and some complex constructions are difficult to follow. For example, “two years ago, I have completed” mixes past-time reference with the present perfect; use “I completed … two years ago.” There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries in “in Australian magazine” and “baby.However,” as well as inconsistent capitalisation of “I.” The phrase “I would like to works” has an incorrect verb form after “to.” Practise accurate tense choices, infinitives, articles, and punctuation, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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