Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Smith,

I am writing to you because I saw your advertisement in a magazine about wanting a nanny for your 6-year-old child who lives with you for 6 months.

Firstly, I was interested in you because I have experience for that position with certified nanny. Along with this, I love to enjoy time with kids, and I have to pay for my further studies and bills. I know I am a perfect fit for this job because I have worked before with the same age group.

I know a lot about Australia because I went there before for another job. Moreover, I know about more activities that i would enjoy with your kids, such as painting, drawing, and so on.

I would really appreciate it if you could give me this job offer. I am waiting for your response.

Thank you,

Kind regards.

Muskan Mittu.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by expressing interest, mentioning childcare experience, and referring to activities you could do with the child. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: your reasons for wanting the job are brief, and the financial reason (“pay for my further studies and bills”) is not developed. Your suitability is asserted rather than supported with details such as specific duties, qualifications, or examples of caring for children. Most importantly, you do not explain how you would spend your free time in Australia; activities “with your kids” concern the job, not your own leisure time. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Add relevant detail to each point, especially your free-time plans, to make the letter complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the advertisement, explain your interest and experience, mention Australia, and close with a request for a reply. Paragraph breaks and transitions such as “Firstly” and “Moreover” help the reader follow the basic structure. However, the progression is not always clear: the paragraph about knowing Australia shifts from your previous visit to activities with the child, without addressing your own free time. “Along with this” also links ideas mechanically, and the closing phrases “Thank you” and “Kind regards” are awkwardly separated. Group the three requested points into clear paragraphs and use more precise links between related ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the general purpose, including “advertisement,” “experience,” “position,” and examples of activities such as “painting” and “drawing.” Some wording, however, is imprecise or unnatural and limits the clarity of your message. For example, “I was interested in you” does not clearly express interest in the position, while “experience for that position with certified nanny” is difficult to interpret. “I know about more activities” is also an awkward way to introduce your ideas. Aim for more accurate job-related collocations and distinguish clearly between childcare activities and leisure plans. More precise vocabulary would make your reasons and suitability easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use mostly simple sentences, with some attempts to connect ideas using “because,” “along with,” and “Moreover.” The main message is generally understandable, but control is uneven in longer or more complex sentences. In “I saw your advertisement … about wanting a nanny for your 6-year-old child who lives with you for 6 months,” the relative clause is confusing and the time phrase is attached awkwardly. “I have experience for that position” also shows an inaccurate grammatical pattern. Capitalise “I” consistently, and use a clear sentence structure to explain your experience and plans. Practising accurate complex sentences alongside simple ones will help you express the task points more clearly.

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