Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I came to know the about your search of a person to take care of you child and I am writing you to express my interest to live with your family and look after your child. I am taking a gap year and looking for a part-time work at this moment which is why I think this work will be perfect opportunity for me.

I am studying in Early Childhood Development and I have experience with working with young children at Maple Wood Daycare centre. There I was responsible for planning age appropriate activities and meal preparation for the children. I also have done an online CPR course to treat medical emergency due to choke or food allergy. I believe these experiecnces make me a suitable person to take care of your kid.

As I moved here in Australia from Malaysia for a short time, I would like to explore the surroundings and visit the major tourist attractions. I do not have any fixed schedule and my routine will be quite flexible. Therefore, I can plan my day according to your work schedule and make myself available.

Yours Faithfully

Promi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you explain that the role suits your gap year, describe relevant childcare study and daycare experience, and outline plans to explore Australia while remaining flexible. The practical details about planning activities, preparing meals and completing CPR training make your suitability convincing. This meets the task well, although some points are less fully developed than others. In particular, your reason for wanting to live with the family is mostly linked to finding work, and your free-time plans remain general; one specific example of an activity or place you hope to visit would add depth. The closing also offers availability, but could clarify how your plans would fit around the child’s care needs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: the opening states your purpose, the next paragraph presents your qualifications, and the final paragraph covers your plans in Australia and availability. This makes the message easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “which is why,” “There,” and “Therefore” to connect ideas. At times, however, the links feel somewhat mechanical, and the final paragraph moves quickly from sightseeing to work availability. A clearer transition could show how you would balance personal activities with your responsibilities. Paragraphing is appropriate, but more precise connections between the reason for applying and your plans would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the purpose, including relevant terms such as “Early Childhood Development,” “age appropriate activities,” “meal preparation,” and “CPR course.” These details communicate your experience clearly, and the tone is generally suitable for a formal enquiry. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however, as in “search of a person,” “part-time work,” and “treat medical emergency due to choke or food allergy.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “experiecnces.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision. Aim to use natural phrases for childcare duties and emergency training, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the reason clause in “which is why I think this work will be perfect opportunity for me” and the result link “Therefore, I can plan my day…”. Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “I came to know the about” has an incorrect article pattern, “your child” is written as “you child,” and “I am writing you” is missing a preposition. Articles are also missing in “will be perfect opportunity” and “planning age appropriate activities.” Review article use, possessives and verb patterns, and proofread sentence punctuation. Greater accuracy across these structures would make the letter more polished.

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