Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in order to inform you about my availability for the job which you advertised in a magazine.Recently, I got admitted in a univeristy which in near to your area, due to which I will be moving to Australlia next week. I belong to a humble background, and I have to bear my own expenses during this period of my stay. When I saw your advertisement, I found it to be a perfect opportunity for myself.

Additionally, I have been taking care of childern for past three years. Therefore, I have the required experience to take care of a child in an amicable way. Apart from that, I have a good command in story-telling, and making healthy diets for toddlers.

Moreover, I have to attend only two classes per week, which will leave me with an ample amount of time to spend with your child. I would love to spend my free time with your baby. I can take him to the nearest parks, and can show him many amusement sites for his overall mental exposure.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Zain

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that the position would help cover your expenses, describe three years of childcare experience, and outline activities such as visiting parks. The details about storytelling and preparing healthy food also make your suitability more specific. This meets the task well, while some ideas remain less fully developed: for example, you mention taking the child to “amusement sites” but do not explain what these are or how they would suit a six-year-old. The reason for wanting the job is mainly financial, so adding a personal interest in childcare or living with an Australian family would make your motivation more rounded. The letter is appropriately framed and maintains a clear, relevant purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from your reason for applying, to your childcare experience, and then to your availability and plans with the child. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Therefore,” and “Moreover” help connect the points. The reader can follow the message without difficulty. To make the organisation more natural and flexible, avoid relying on a connector at the start of nearly every paragraph or sentence; some links, such as “Therefore,” are also more explicit than necessary. You could group your availability with your proposed childcare arrangements, and use pronouns or a brief reference to connect ideas smoothly. Overall, the structure is coherent and the progression is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the letter and attempt some less common expressions, including “amicable,” “ample amount,” and “overall mental exposure.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural in context: “good command in story-telling” and “amusement sites” do not express your meaning idiomatically, while “baby” is not the best fit for a six-year-old. There are also spelling errors such as “univeristy,” “Australlia,” and “childern,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but more precise collocations and careful proofreading would strengthen the impression. Prefer straightforward, natural wording when a more elaborate phrase feels uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “the job which you advertised” and a reason clause beginning “due to which.” Most sentences communicate their meaning, but some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “a univeristy which in near” is missing the verb “is,” and “I have been taking care of childern for past three years” needs an article before “the past three years.” In “I can take him to the nearest parks, and can show him,” the repeated auxiliary is unnecessary, and the comma before “and” is not needed. There is also a missing space after the full stop in “magazine.Recently.” Review articles, verb forms, and sentence punctuation to improve control.

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