Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement given in Rogers magazine for a childcare job opportunity.

I would like to have this job as I have completed my childhood care study recently with six-months of training. After completion, I am applying in various companies but this type of direct chance to take care of a six-year-old child would be my dream job.

I would be the best one for this role bacause next month I am coming to Australia to meet my sister and I have a valid visa with one year of authorized stay. On top of that, I am already taking care of my own child.

I like the nature most, so my free time would be dedicated to see the oceans, tracking in the hilly area and camping as well. I would appreciate your company.

I am looking forward to hear from you.

Yours faithfully,

Zorawar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and maintain a suitable formal letter format. The reason for wanting the role is clear: you have recently completed childcare studies and see caring for a child as a dream job. You also give relevant reasons you could be suitable, including your training, visa and experience caring for your own child. However, the suitability point would be stronger with specific examples of your childcare skills or responsibilities. Your plans for free time are relevant, but “see the oceans” and “camping” are listed rather than explained. This meets the task well overall, while some ideas remain less fully developed; adding a little detail to each would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph serving a distinct purpose: explaining your interest, presenting your suitability, and describing your free-time plans. The progression is easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “On top of that” help connect supporting information. The opening and closing also make the response recognisable as a formal letter. Some connections are less smooth: “I would be the best one for this role” is followed by your travel plans, which do not directly establish your childcare suitability, and “I would appreciate your company” is not clearly linked to the preceding ideas. Make these relationships explicit and use a more purposeful closing to strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task and includes relevant terms such as “childcare,” “training,” “valid visa,” and “authorized stay.” You also attempt more specific expressions, including “direct chance” and “dedicated,” but some choices are unnatural or imprecise in context. For example, “childhood care study” is not the usual term for this qualification, while “tracking in the hilly area” does not clearly express the outdoor activity you intend. There is also a spelling error in “bacause.” These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but more accurate collocations and careful proofreading would make the letter sound more natural and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason clause in “as I have completed…” and the sentence beginning “After completion…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect naturalness. For example, “I am looking forward to hear from you” needs a gerund after “looking forward to,” and “six-months of training” has an unnecessary plural ending in this construction. In “my free time would be dedicated to see,” the verb pattern after “dedicated to” is also incorrect. Review verb patterns, articles and plural forms, and aim to produce more consistently accurate complex sentences while retaining your clear meaning.

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