Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to enquire about the advertisement you posted in an Australian magazine to look after your six-years old child and taking care of family. I would appreciate more information related to it as I need this job to fulfill my expenses.

Firstly, I think I would be the best person for this role as I enjoy being around kids and play with them as well as I am so friendly and love to be surrounded with family members. Moreover, I am also looking for a place to stay somewhere where I feel like staying with the family. In addition, I will be able to do light household chores and adapt the new environment quickly.

Secondly, If i love visiting landmarks, hills and beaches in my leisure time while in Australia. I love reading books, scrolling instagram and taking photographs.

I would be grateful if you will consider my application. Looking forward to hear from you.

Thank you,

Best regards,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explained your motivation, highlighted your suitability, and described your leisure activities. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention you are 'friendly' and enjoy being around kids, providing a specific example of past childcare experience would have made your application much more persuasive. Additionally, the reason given for needing the job—'to fulfill my expenses'—is a bit blunt for a formal letter. To improve, try to expand on your points with more detail and ensure the tone remains professional throughout the entire letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points easily. You have used some basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is slightly abrupt, and the use of 'Secondly' is followed by a sentence fragment ('If i love visiting...'), which disrupts the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus without grammatical interruptions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for this task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'enquire', 'advertisement', and 'leisure time'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'fulfill my expenses' (instead of 'cover my expenses') and 'adapt the new environment' (which should be 'adapt to the new environment'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives would also help make your letter sound more natural and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'six-years old child' (should be 'six-year-old child'), 'taking care of family' (missing article), and the sentence fragment 'If i love visiting...'. Additionally, there are issues with verb tense and agreement, such as 'Looking forward to hear from you' (should be 'hearing'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb forms.

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