Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing about to apply live with your family and take care of your six year child.To be honest I am from India and I have lots of experience to take care of baby boys and girls in my hometown because I am here. Also do a take care of children’s. I want to apply in Australia for take care of your child. I am a very good listener and patient person, and I am very excited to become your family member if you give me a opportunity. Your Member like six old child. It is grateful for me like in my I will learn your mother tongue, English language. It is helpful for me to improve my communication. As well as in my laser time I want to go outside and I will see the weather and the culture. I am very excited to learn your culture. It is grateful for me. thank you for considering my application. I am very excited to join your family.
Yours faithfully,
Gurupreet Singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and describing your plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, your explanation of why you are suitable is brief and lacks specific examples of your childcare experience. The response is also somewhat repetitive, and the tone is not consistently appropriate for a formal letter to a family. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detail and ensure the tone remains professional throughout the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. You should use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, the body points, and the conclusion. While you use some basic cohesive devices like 'Also' and 'As well as', the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of clear paragraph structure and the repetitive nature of the sentences. Using a wider range of linking words and organizing your ideas into distinct paragraphs would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express your ideas precisely. Phrases like 'take care of' are used repeatedly, and there are some awkward word choices, such as 'laser time' (likely meaning 'leisure time') and 'mother tongue'. You rely on simple, high-frequency words, which prevents you from demonstrating a wider range of vocabulary. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied and precise language related to childcare and personal qualities, and ensure you use words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'I am writing about to apply live with your family', 'I have lots of experience to take care of baby boys', and 'It is grateful for me'. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms. Incorporating a few more complex sentence structures would also help improve your score.
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