Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hi there ,

I hope you are doing well . Here am looking for full time job . I would like to get this position because of i am not having job currently .I am ready to work full time as well . I would be best fit for this role . I have done course in early childhood . In this course , i have done all important things practically ,that could be helpful to do this job perfectly with hands on experience .Moreover ,i am comfortable to live in family and take care of your child . i would like to spend my leisure time while doing some workout in park like as jogging , running and cycling . Because, i try to stay fit . I would also give preference to reading books ,and listening soft music in my free time . Please let me know if this role is available .

best regards,

Sukhpreet kaur .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the motivation for the job, detailing suitability, and describing leisure activities. However, the development of these points is quite basic. For instance, the explanation of why you want the job is limited to 'not having a job currently,' which lacks professional depth. Similarly, while you mention an early childhood course, you could have elaborated more on specific skills or previous experiences to make your application more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Hi there' is slightly informal for a job application addressed to 'Dear Sir or Madam'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into a logical sequence, moving from the purpose of the letter to personal qualifications and finally to personal interests. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'In this course' and 'Moreover' are used, but the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. Paragraphing is also insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block of text, which makes it harder to read. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks to separate the different topics requested in the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite limited and simple. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'best fit for this role' and 'do this job perfectly.' There are some awkward collocations, such as 'done course' instead of 'completed a course' and 'doing some workout' instead of 'exercising.' While the meaning is always clear, there is a lack of more sophisticated or precise vocabulary that would be expected at a higher band level. Expanding your range of verbs and adjectives related to professional experience and personal interests would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in park', 'in family'), verb tenses ('Here am looking'), and punctuation (incorrect spacing before commas). The sentence 'I would like to spend my leisure time while doing some workout in park like as jogging' is grammatically cluttered. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.