Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in an Australian magazine which I am interested in. i would like to help in this because i just done with my study so, I am looking for a work right now . in would like this job because of i spent a lot of time with my nephew i0, so i would like to spend my free time with a kid.

I feel like i can take care of your child i have little experience how to take care of him, When they cry how to distract them to play , I would really like to play with them that's the reason why I am suitable for you.

While I'm in Australia i will spend my time with doing some activities like cycling, swimming because i would like to spend time on beach i heard that Australia has nice beach I mean very clean, beautiful that's how i would like invest my free time.

Please look after my application

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for applying, suitability for the role, and plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of suitability relies on vague statements like 'I have little experience how to take care of him' rather than providing specific examples of childcare responsibilities. The tone is also somewhat informal and inconsistent for a formal letter of application. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detail and ensure the tone remains professional throughout the entire correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas smoothly within sentences. For example, the transition between discussing your interest in the job and your experience is abrupt. Additionally, the punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent run-on sentences and missing capital letters (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'), which disrupts the flow of the text. Improving the use of transition words like 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in addition' would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express ideas with precision. You rely on simple phrases such as 'look after' and 'spend time,' which are used multiple times. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'invest my free time' and 'i just done with my study.' To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to childcare and professional settings. Avoid repeating the same words and try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and precise verbs to convey your suitability for the position more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are persistent issues with verb tense consistency, such as 'i just done with my study' instead of 'I have just finished my studies.' Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure are also problematic, with many run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring proper capitalization, and checking for subject-verb agreement. Reducing the number of errors in simple sentences should be your primary goal before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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