Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I hope you are doing well. My name is Ronak Rathod. I saw your advertisement in an Australian magazine due to take care your child few months. I can apply this job related my profile.

However, I am student in Tom University. I am searching job part-time basically afternoon. I had already working these type of job last year. I know very well hoe take care children.I would like the job.

Therefore, My profile proper suitable for as per your requirement related. I can very esay way to manage your child take care work.

Furthermore,If you are selected my application then I am working your home. Due my free time I will visite multiple places and I like reading more then goign to library.

I hope you understand my request regarding this job. I hope you are positive response for my job related that letter.

Yours Sincerely,

Ronak Rathod.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for wanting the job, suitability, and plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For example, the explanation of why you are suitable is vague, stating only that you have 'already working these type of job'. The tone is also inconsistent for a formal letter, and the opening 'Dear sir' does not match the required 'Dear Sir or Madam' provided in the prompt. To improve, you should provide more specific details about your experience and expand on your plans for your free time in Australia to create a more persuasive and professional tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for a letter. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the use of 'Therefore' and 'Furthermore' feels forced and does not always logically connect the preceding and following sentences. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack clear transitions, making the flow of ideas somewhat disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express ideas with precision. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'I can very esay way to manage your child take care work' and 'I am working your home'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to understand your exact meaning. To improve, you should focus on learning common collocations related to employment and daily activities, and work on using more precise verbs and adjectives rather than relying on simple, repetitive structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('I had already working'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly constructed, such as 'I am student in Tom University' (missing articles) and 'If you are selected my application then I am working your home'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures significantly impacts the clarity of the writing. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, articles, and verb forms before attempting more complex structures.

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