Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in the babysitting position for the six month.

My name is Harman and I have recently completed my studies in Early childhood education. I am taking some time off to decide what I want to pursue further for my masters. I am interested in this job because I want to travel and explore Australia before starting my studies next year. Moreover, I want to experience the culture and build a portfolio for my masters.

I have worked at a local day care centre in Sydney and on average I have managed 10 children in one shift. I am friendly, reliable and responsible person who can manage a child alone without any supervision. In addition, I can help the child with their daily homework and extra circular activities which can enhance their learning abilities.

If I get the job, I have planned to spend my day-off visiting my friends and family in the town. Moreover, I have created an itinerary for the six months which includes visiting museums, zoos, beaches and volunteering at the local hospital. I hope you will consider my application and see you soon. If you need further information please let me know.

Kind regards,

Harman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt effectively. You clearly explained your motivation for the job, provided relevant details about your background in early childhood education to demonstrate suitability, and outlined your plans for your free time. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter of application. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the context of the advertisement. You have maintained a consistent focus on the requirements throughout the letter, ensuring the reader understands both your professional qualifications and your personal intentions for your stay in Australia.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You have used cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'If I get the job' to link your ideas effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. The progression of ideas is smooth, and the letter is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that referencing remains precise throughout; for example, ensure that pronouns clearly link back to the intended subjects to avoid any ambiguity in more complex sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Terms such as 'pursue', 'itinerary', and 'volunteering' demonstrate a good command of language. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'extra circular activities' (which should be 'extracurricular') and 'six month' (which should be 'six months'). While these errors are present, they do not impede communication. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations or idiomatic expressions that are natural in a professional context, such as 'gain hands-on experience' or 'demonstrate a strong commitment'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You have used a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Your control over grammar is generally good, though there are some slips, such as 'I am friendly, reliable and responsible person' (missing the article 'a') and 'extra circular' (spelling). Most of your sentences are error-free, and your punctuation is generally accurate. To achieve a higher score, focus on ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. The use of conditional structures ('If I get the job...') is well-handled and adds variety to your grammatical range.

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