Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing a letter to spend my leisure time I would like to doing a job. I am look after your child from 6 months in Australia. Your child are very intelligent and pick up all things about study while experiencing life in Australia perfectly aligns with my background and personal goals.

I would like this job because I am deep passion for working with children and exploring new culture. Six is a wonderful age for learning and play. Additionally, immersing myself in an Australian family environment and also allow me too experience your culture firsthand.

I am highly qualified for this role due to my extensive background in childcare. I have work a part time baby sitter for several families over the past three years looking after aged of children four to eight. It's taught to me, but too much beneficent for me in present life because I have gain much experience like some activities, healthy meals and maintain safe environment.

During my free time, I plan to explore the beautiful Australian landscape and local communities. I love outdoor activities and hope go to hiking, visit your famous beaches, and explore local museums.

Thank you for considering my application. I am waiting to possibility of discussing how I can support your family.

Yours faithfully,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining why you want the job, detailing your suitability, and describing your plans for free time. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. For instance, the explanation of your suitability is a bit repetitive and lacks clarity in certain sentences. To improve, ensure that each point is fully expanded with clear, logical sentences. While the purpose of the letter is clear, some phrasing is slightly confusing, which hinders the overall impact of your message.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Additionally' and 'During my free time,' to transition between ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as the transition in the first paragraph which feels abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making some sentences feel disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more fluid and natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'immersing,' 'environment,' and 'landscape.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'too much beneficent' instead of 'highly beneficial' and 'I have gain much experience' instead of 'I have gained significant experience.' These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not prevent the message from being understood. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Your child are'), incorrect verb forms ('I am look after,' 'I have work'), and awkward sentence construction ('It's taught to me, but too much beneficent'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading your work for these specific types of errors before submitting will significantly enhance your score.

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